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Tourism is becoming a good source of revenue to many countries. Discuss advantages and drawbacks.



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Aug 16, 2021   #1

benefits and negative effects of tourism



Tourism is a matter of dispute. Some people reckon that it exerts deleterious impacts on human life whereas others adhere to that it kickstarts the national budget. My essay is going to throw some light on the upsides and downsides of this issue.

Developing tourism has many benefits. Owing to the tourism industry, countries can earn millions of dollars every year. Especially in a developing country, the income from the smokeless industry is the focus of those countries. In addition, it puts the national image on the map so the country is getting more and more prosperous and people's living standards are higher. In terms of culture, not only do youngsters look up to national tradition but we also feel proud. We learn the best quintessence. Japan as a telling example, the young passionate cultures so it attracts tourists from all walk of life and gives our opportunity to explore different parts of the world.

Besides the numerous advantages, tourism has drawbacks. Tourism growth exerts ruinous effects on the environment. Environmental reports have started that marine ecosystems are gradually disappearing because of the risk of overfishing to serve the tourism industry. It can destroy the natural habitats and spoil the landscape in local areas because the number of tourists cannot be controlled. Moreover, some tourists who often lack respect for local traditions, behave rudely in public or inappropriately towards locals.

In conclusion, tourism benefits national economies. However, its negative effects cannot be avoided.

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15384  
Aug 17, 2021   #2
The essay is 243 words and does not meet the word requirements for the task. An addition to that shortcoming, it also appears that the student combined 2 different tourism discussion points for this presentation. sadly, each topic the usites chose had a different discussion format to be followed. That is why the First paragraph is a confusing mess that does not offer a coherent representation of the discussion topic and writing style to be used in the reasoning paragraphs. The prompt restatement is a failure in terms of clearly restating the topic basis, making it difficult to assess if the correct response style was used.

The reasoning paragraphs seem to not have a clear topic sentence. What is a smokeless industry and how does it relate to tourism? The inclusion of national image and culture is understandable but largely explained in an inefficient manner. The thoughts of the writer needs to be better thought out, drafted, and converted to English to create an effective paragraph.

The writer has very little control of his English word usage and sentence presentations. Further improvements in these areas are needed before the writer proceeds with more essay practice teats.


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