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Tourist guide dedicates to expound foreigner on place, building, estate, etc.


Ifan21 22 / 24 2  
Sep 17, 2016   #1
Summary for TED "For More Tolerance We Need More Tourism" (Aziz Abu Sarah)

Who says being Tourist guide just dedicate to expound foreigner on place, building, estate etc. Base on Aziz Abu Sarah, Palestine Tour guide, explain about his another point of view about tourism. In fact, when he was kid, his brother has been killed by mass murder. He got angry and hold a grudge to foreigner. In reverse, he has significantly altered his mindset and have a good relation with the man from another country since he got chance to study overseas. Eventually he found his feet on Tourist guide. Base on his statement "Tourist guide not only explain historical story and place but also can be make a great relation with tourist". For instance he has fun time with another people who comes from country across the globe, like drink party and sing along together without any suspicious feeling. The most suppressing fact, that his co-worker is Israeli and they both have harmonious interdependence.

ichanpants89 [Contributor] 16 / 777 309  
Sep 17, 2016   #2
Hello, Ifan. I found that your essay is a decent one. Still, there are several issues in grammar and punctuation to be considered as follows:

- Base on Aziz Abu Sarah, a Palestine Tour guide, explain ...
- In fact, When he was a kid, his brother has ...
- In reverseHowever , he has significantly altered his mindset and havemade a good relation with thea man from another country since ...
- Eventually,(a comma is necessary here) he found ...
- Base on his statementHe said that "tourist guide not only explain....
- For instance,(please put a comma here) he has fun time with ...
- The most suppressing fact,is that his co-worker is Israeli ...

Hope this help.


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