Due to a dramatic rise in population,
This is a personal opinion on your part. Therefore, you cannot use this as a part of the prompt restatement. The prompt restatement demands that you only rephrase the original information provided. You could move this personal opinion to your writer's opinion section towards the end of the paragraph though. You will receive additional points towards this statement since it helps establish a clear idea of what your discussion will be about. There will be 2 deductions for this paragraph. The incorrect positioning of your personal opinion, and the lack of proper personal opinion presentation in response to the questions provided.
There are countless reasons leading to traffic congestion. First and foremost,
Do not waste the word count and writing time on filler presentations. A filler presentation is a sentence that does not help to move your thought process or explanation along. You do not need long introductions. What you actually need are topic anchor sentences at the start of every paragraph.