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Transport - the line graph show the quantities of goods



samsumkite 1 / 1  
Apr 22, 2020   #1

Goods transported in the UK



the given line graph compares the amount og good transported ny road,water, rail and pipeline in the uk during 1974 to 2002.
Overall ,the highest quantities of good was shipped via road whereas pipeline remained tge least commonly used mode of transportation .
As can be seen from the line the graph,70 milion tonnez of commodities were transported by road in 1974 and this quantities increased to about 97 milion tonnez at the end of period (2002),while pipeline started with 1 milion tonnes of goods in 1974.This figure rose 20 milion tonnes of good were delivered in the year 2002.

According to the given line graph,Rail and water transported 40 milion tonnes of commodies in 1974 and this quantity had some changes .In details,the amount of goods were shipped via water went up about 62 milion tonnes in 2002 while rail still mantained the same figure of the year 1974 (40 milion tonnes) before had the decrease from 1986 to 1994 (35 milion tonnes of goods)

In conclusion,road transportation and water transportation carried more quantities than 2 transportation left

minhthu121 2 / 5  
Apr 22, 2020   #2
This may be your first time writing a report because there are lots of mistakes.
" during 1974 to 2002". Totally wrong phrase. It could be "during a 28-year period from 1974 to 2002"
You should use more adverb to indicate inaccurate number like "approximately, around, nearly"
Like this sentence "around 70 million tonnes of ..."
The conclusion is not necessary and you should learn more how to write task 1 IELTS.

The biggest problem is that you don't split up sentences, leading to a mess in both paragraphs. You should fix in this way

"As can be seen from the line... Meanwhile, pipeline started with ..."

".In detail,the amount of goods ... Besides, rail still maintained ..."

You should check your spelling before submitting or no one will give you feedback. At some point, I think you are writing another language.


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OP samsumkite 1 / 1  
Apr 22, 2020   #3
thanks you a lot,sorry for my typo
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15393  
Apr 23, 2020   #4
You did not provide the image for this essay so I cannot review it based on the relevance of your writing to the prompt requirements. I will be reviewing your essay for several grammar issues instead which will definitely lead to a non-passing score for this essay, even though you wrote 179 words in it. It is never the length that will dictate the passing score. Writing the bare minimum can result in a band score of 5. Overwriting, but not really paying attention to details, always results in a failing test score.

Spelling errors:
og-go
ny= by
tge- the

Capitalization errors:
uk = UK

You have made so many spelling errors that I cannot correct all 28 of them in this review. You did not even bother to try and spell properly, nor check your spelling. Are you sure you want to pass this test? All your errors were simply caused by mistyping. In the real world, you can correct the errors. At the testing center, your errors can also be corrected provided you take the time to do so. These errors alone will be enough to get you the lowest failing score in the overall consideration. I haven't even begun to check your GRA and LR related errors at this point and I can already tell that this is a non-passing essay.


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