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TOEFL; "traveling ten thousands miles"; The best way to travel is in a group


aliceNN 8 / 23  
Sep 19, 2013   #1
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide.

As a Chinese old saying goes" traveling ten thousands miles and reading ten thousands books is the top idea for people."People always considered about travel is a way to enlarge their outlook and relax their tired mindset. Moreover, determine choose which sort of travel is the foundation of a good trip, some prefer to travel by themselves, while others desire to travel by a group.To agree or disagree the statement that traveling in a group by a tour guide is the best way is a matter of balancing its pros and cons. However , if one considers it carefully, he or she may disagree the title statement as I do.

To begin with, travel on our own means that we can choose palces that we are most interested in without any limitations. All things are depended on ourselves.We can make an elaborate plan by ourselves , when to arrive, where to see , what to eat and how to get there.What's more, we can cancel some expensive and time-comsuming schedules in terms of limitation of money and time.However, travel with a group cannot enjoy such a freedom.Suppose you travel in a group , travel agency often make some unnecessary plans to gain profit from these activities , and tour guides always to take you to some souvenir shops to buy loads of unpractical items and commodities, which they can get additional fee.

In addition, travel by ourselves allow us to have a loose visiting time to enjoy landscape better. We can decide when to arrive, when to have a rest and when to leave the sights during the travel process. Nevertheless, due to it's hard to in harmony with other travelers in terms of visiting time when we travel in a group, travel agencies often take a rigid shedule to visit landcapes for visitors, which can decrease ensusiastic of visitors and destroy their journey to some extent.

Although travelling by a group can deduct energy and time we spent on planning our trip, I prefer travel by ourselves, because we can make desicion on our own, and from this decision-making process, we can not only creat a original and wonderful journey but also improve our disicion making abilities.
hpatel 3 / 6 1  
Sep 20, 2013   #2
nice introduction...

travel on our own means that we can choose palces
travelling on our own means that we can choose palces
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
Sep 20, 2013   #3
You have very good writing skills.

Although travelling byin a group

You follow the desired structure for this task.... If you managed to finish this essay on time, I think you do not have to worry about this task at all. You can certainly go for a very good score and you can now concentrate on other tasks :)

Wish you good luck with TOEFL!
Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
Sep 20, 2013   #4
In addition, travel by ourselves allow us to have aloose visitingspare time to enjoy landscape better.

... Well, I think your idea has not come out the way you really intended :) Let me put it in a different way;
In addition, solo travelling enables us to enjoy more flexibility during the tour. In other words, we do not have to abide to a strict itinerary and spend our travel days the way we wish. For example, we have the freedom either to keep our day busy with visiting lots of places or enjoy more free time to admire scenery or beautiful landscapes.


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