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IELTS TASK 1 : Travelled Abroad, Why Travelled Abroad and Destinations Over the Same Period


dinartika19 37 / 67 6  
Aug 13, 2016   #1
Topic :

The first chart below shows the results of a survey which sampled a cross section of 100,000 people asking if they travelled abroad and why they travelled abroad for the period 1994 - 98. The second chart shows their destinations over the same period

The information of the diagram divided by two types : the result of the people took a trip abroad and why they did it and their destinations in excess of the same time. The period is from 1994 until 1998. Overall, 1998 is the golden year for UK citizens who had a trip abroad and most of visitor went to Western Europe as the best choice for holiday.

As we can see from the first table, the favourite purpose to visit abroad is holiday. It alway become the best from 1994 - 1998.. With about 1,000 difference, bussiness and visits to friends and relatives get second and third position. The last place is other reason with below 1,000 and just get more than 1,000 i 1996 and 1997. Not only become the most interesting reason, but holiday also has the biggest increase from year 1994 -1998.

From the second graph as destinations of visit abroad by UK residents, the most enjoyable place to go was Western Europe by more than 18,000 travellers per year and the smalest number UK residents to visit abroad is North Americawith less than 2,000 visitors. The greatest year for UK travelers is in 1998 with total amount 28,828 citizens and the smalest number of visitors is in 1995 about less than 22,000 people.


  • Chart 1 : Visits Abroad by UK Residents by Purpose of Visit ( 1994 - 1998)

  • Chart 2 : Destination of Visits Abroad By UK residents by Main Region (1994-1998)

intana28 4 / 6  
Aug 13, 2016   #2
Hello dina,
here is my comment,

I hope you can avoid 'we' from writing task 1 to make your writing more formal.

As we can see from the first table ; According to the table,..


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