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The two maps display an area before and after the development in Brandenburg over 20 years period


andika08 81 / 80 16  
Nov 21, 2016   #1
The two maps display about an area before and after the development in Bradenburg over twenty year period. Overall, there are significant change with the several facilities that had been built in the town.

In the center of town, after the construction, the railway station was constructed to across the sea between left and right area. Moving to the eastern side, the facilities such as big building was developed bigger than before that close to the bridge. Also, the tree was cutting-down and witnessed drop the number. In south-east, the interesting side come from the supermarket replaced many houses. However, the house experienced decrease number by four.

Turning to the western side, the airport was built near to the school. On the right side, it can be seen that there is a massive development in settlement sector with the improvement by two houses. In addition, in the bottom side, the factory and the port were constructed in close to the railway station.



nda18 46 / 81 9  
Nov 21, 2016   #2
Hi dika, these are my thought towards your essay

...Bradenburg over twenty years period.
...Overall, there are significant changes with the several ...
[ i think you should be more careful in singular or plural verb (SVA) ]

In the center of town, after the construction, the railway station was constructed to across the sea between ...
[ i think there are some mistakes in this sentence.
1. the railway is not in the center of the town.
2. it is not railway station that had been constructed, but the new railway line
3. it is not across the sea, but across the land ]

..., the facilities such as big building was developed bigger ...
[ it would be better if you explain what kind of building it is ]

... were constructed in closed to the railway station.

thank you
mem77 62 / 98 6  
Nov 21, 2016   #3
Dear Andika, here some advice for your writing and feel free to correct me too!

...there arewere significant changes with the several facilities ...

... as big building was redeveloped bigger than before that , closeclosing to the bridge.

...and witnessed a drop thenumberproportion.

... experienced a decrease number by four.

... was built near toby the school.

it cancould be seen that there iswas a massive development in ...

Regards


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