Topic - Some of the methods used in advertising are unethical and unacceptable in society.To what extent do you agree with this view?
It is certainly true to say that the strategies used for advertising by some organisations are considered immoral and not acceptable in today's community. The essay is fully agreed with this statement and talk about why people think so along with some method in the following paras with a reasoned conclusion.
The first strategy that's unacceptable in these present days is misrepresentation of products. To be more precise, sometimes advertisers attach a slogan such as this product available for a limited amount of time, which consequently put impacts on people to buy the product within given time to take advantage of it without a consideration. For example, a TV channel Shop CJ, where always one time limit is displayed with all products in order to increase the sales.
A second approach for advertising that most of the Internet users use is pop up of websites. Actually, it is totally irritate the dwellers, because what data they want, open after a several pop-up sites. For instance, the Techmahindra.com, where for every click one pop up site is open. Another adverts of this kind is related to those companies which hire famous personalities to promote and to encourage people to buy their products. A best known example of this is Varun Dhawan, who promote fairness cream which is often has some negative consequences.
In conclusion, I would like to point out that many advertisers use different approaches to advert their products and most of these methods are not appreciated by the citizens,because it's just encourage them to buy the certain things.
Jag, I hope you won't mind if I call you that. I would like to call your attention to the introduction of your essay. It is lacking in development. As you know, you need to restate the prompt in your own words before offering an agreement or disagreement with the topic. That is not found in your current introduction. You should never state that "The essay will agree..." In this type of essay, you must write from a first person point of view. Therefore, the pronoun "I" should be used in stating the agreement with the prompt. Do not use shortcuts when writing formal essays such as this. Therefore, it is not correct to say "paras". While that is acceptable in some circles, in the academic and formal writing circle the full word "paragraph" is the only acceptable term. That shortcut could cost you a point deduction in a formal English test.
Throughout the essay, you mention the ways that the advertisers unethical methods to promote their products. Yet you do not offer a solid reason behind why you view this as unethical. Offering evidence without supporting facts does not create a strong essay. You need to always make sure that you can back up your claims with valid reasons.
Try to limit your reasons to only one within a given paragraph. One well discussed line of reasoning is always better than several under developed reasons such as the ones you provided in your second paragraph. Those are a lot of representations of unethical advertising but there is one valid supporting argument existing for one reason. When you say a product has negative consequences, cite what it is as part of your claim that the advertiser practiced unethical advertising.
Try to avoid presenting additional reasons in your conclusion. An effective conclusion should merely end the discussion, not encourage more discussion as your conclusion currently does. Try to take note of these weaknesses in your current essay and try to address them in your next practice essay. If you follow these instructions, your writing and analytical skills will definitely begin to improve.
Let I try it -
A one strategy of advertising that considered unethical is the way to encourage people to buy the products Which might be unuseful and not affordable.Young people as well as children in particular, who are immature attract towards these products such as latest toy, music and any other and this can put stress on parents to fulfill their children needs. For example, my cousin who actually demand for those toys or things that he watch in television advert no matter what the cost is.
