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Should University education be free for everyone interested? TOEFL



samalik 2 / 2  
Feb 21, 2013   #1
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
A university education should be provided free of charge to all interested scholars

A famous proverb "Knowledge is power" has demonstrated the value of education. I believe that universities should provide free of cost education to the interested scholars because now-a-days universities with good name charge high fees and this leads one to think about affordability. I have observed that many of the interested scholars failed to get the admission in good universities because they have to think about work along with the studies, and this left them with only one choice, which is work.

University is more likely to become a money making business, the issue of affordability has become crucial to the students. In today's world education is getting expensive, and people are tending to apply for self-finance education in order to get the admission. Whereas, the scholars are facing a lot of difficulties apart from their high requirements of previous education, they has a lot to face the other difficulties and burden while getting admission such as accommodation, food, traveling, clothing, etc.

Moreover, it is hard to get manage two things at a time for instance, working and studying is not an easy job for the scholars, they need to concentrate on their studies. M.Phils. and PhDs scholars are probably engage in the research work, which takes their full concentration and surveys. The idea of free of charge education inspires those scholars who really want to put their efforts and get a degree from best universities.

Therefore, universities have to look over the issues face by most of the scholars; their message should be spread education, not making money, and motivate those scholars who want to get education. Their notion should be inspirational in such a way which makes our society educative and increase our literacy rate.

william731 18 / 43  
Feb 21, 2013   #2
I believe that universities should provide free of cost education to the interested scholars because now-a-days universities with good name charge high fees and this leads one to think about affordability

nowadays
high reputation
too vague, not everyone can afford the charges.

they has a lot to face the other difficulties and burden while getting admission such as accommodation, food, traveling, clothing, etc.

they have to face other difficulties such as accommodation, food, traveling and clothing.

M.Phils. and PhDs scholars are probably engage in the research work, which takes their full concentration and surveys

need to explain this point
E.g M.Phils. and PhDs scholars probably keep their full concentration on doing research work and they probably do not have any spare time for work.

universities have to look over the issues face by most of the scholars

faced

their message should be spread education

promoting

should pay attention on the grammatical errors.
dumi 1 / 6793  
Feb 21, 2013   #3
Good editing by William :)

A famous proverb "Knowledge is power" has demonstrateddemonstrates the value of education.

Keep it in present tense, it is more effective :)

free of cost education

you should either say "cost free" or just "free education"

I have observed that many of the interested scholars failed to get the admission into good universities because they have to think about work along with the studies, and this left them with only one choice, which is work.

this is too long and therefore your flow is disturbed. Break it up to improve the clarity;
I have observed many interested students have been deprived of pursuing a tertiary education due to high costs involved with it. Therefore they are left with the only option of work.

Also stress your opinion on this issue more directly in the introduction.
OP samalik 2 / 2  
Feb 21, 2013   #4
Thanks a lot i'll definitely pay attention to these mistakes. :)


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