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{IELTS} Should university education be restricted to the very best academic students?



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Mar 8, 2012   #1
Task:
Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic.

University education should be restricted to the very best academic students, rather than being available to a large proportion of young people.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?


Nowadays, actuality of education quality is as high as never. However, some people reckon that it is necessary to narrow down accessibility of tertiary education to elite students, while other argue that way to the high education have to be widely opened for young generation. In this essay I will present a number of arguments to demonstrate advantages of unlimited education .

To begin with, it is necessary emphasize that owing to the huge impact of rapidly growing modern technology working process become more and more complicated. Not only just finished school pupil has difficulties with an avalanche of information but also sophisticated and experienced specialists. Due to this fact, it is getting clear that every young person has to attain as much knowledge as possible from the very beginning. Furthermore, only in university student acquires uncountable experience of working with unrestricted range of data and study how to combine, sort and analyze it in order to achieve useful result, providing that school lays only the foundation for the development of a person.

In addition, on the ground that development of mind has different pace, equal opportunities for everyone should be given to realise their potential. Moreover, as a rule, university has better environment and equipment in comparison with school what encourage student flourish like a plant in a greenhouse.

In conclusion, I totally agree with the statement that skyrocket spreading of knowledge between future professionals gives much more advantages than disadvantages, because I believe that to uncurb education and to give an equal chance to study in university to everybody are wise steps for future society.

Total: 267 words.

P.S. This is my first work.
I would be grateful for the strict assessment with the most detailed comments.
I hope to get at least 6.5 for the writing part on the exam ...

Thank you for your consideration.

chalumeau /  
Mar 8, 2012   #2
**Quality of _____ education in _______ is as high as ever. However, some people reckon that it is necessary to narrow down accessibility of higher education to elite students, while others argue that educational opportunities for more result in ____ . In this essay, I will present a number of arguments to demonstrate the advantages of easily accessible education.

**To begin with, it is necessary to emphasize that owing to the huge impact of rapidly growing modern technology, work has become more and more complicated. Not only does the new graduate have difficulties with the avalanche of information required to enter the workplace, but also sophisticated and experienced specialists have difficulties. Due to this problem, more time is required to learn the skills necessary for workplace success. Furthermore, the university setting allows students to acquire countless experiences necessary for data analysis, while at the same time, laying the foundation for the development of a person.

**The development of the mind occurs at a different pace for everyone. Therefore, opportunities to access higher education should be present so that students flourish like plants in a greenhouse. Some students bloom immediately, while others take longer. Try to add something here.

Add another argument here.

Refute the counterargument here.


**In conclusion, the skyrocketing spread of knowledge requires more open access to higher education. Give opportunity a chance: wise steps for our future society.

Thanks for sharing.


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