Whether university students should study whatever they like or not

Which subjects for students?

Topic: Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Essay:
A much debated question is whether undergraduates should have the right to choose fields according to their aspiration or they are obligated to study future-oriented subjects. whilst being chosen subjects freely recieves widespread support, the advocacy of focusing on compulsory ones also emerges noticeably. To express my utter approval towards the latter view and provide an unbiased scale, this essay with evaluate both sides of the debate.

One the one hand, there are some arguments in favor of the fact that universities should give the freedom for students to opt their suitable subjects. Firstly, this policy will restrict students to study what they have no interest at all. If students were obliged to learn subjects associated with technology or science without any enthusiasm, it would lead to unexpected results. Secondly, undergraduates are given the chance to challange themselves with enormous fields and hence to strengthen their expertise. For example, a technical student could choose to study economics as a way to accumulate necessesary skills like communicate or persuasive skills.

One the other hand, those harbour the opposite viewpoint usually debunk the previous one by stating consequences of opting without any orientations. Admittedly, undergraduates do not have suffiecient knowledges which is essential for their carrer. This is because students tend to study easy subjects and ignore crutial ones for the purpose is getting high scores. With the labour market becoming increasingly competitive, lacking basic understanding enables graduates to face unemployed sittuation. This can be illustrated in the study undertaken by American professors. They indicated that the percentage of the jobless because they are inadequate science or technology skills occupies up to sixty percent in the total number of reasons causing unemployments. Thus, although there is no denying for advantages of choosing fields freely, in current modern society, it is more important for university students to study oriented subjects.

In conclusion, I believe that students should study compulsory subjects associate with their future. Universitiy also should have consideration to choose the optimal subject lists to ensure graduate's carrer prospect.

You do not need to express an utter disapproval. You merely have to disapprove. This is not an extent essay. Additionally, your response format is incorrect. You must provide a strong representation or explanation of the public point of view first, then present your even stronger opposition to the discussion as your opinion. So the paragraph format should be:

- Topic sentence
- Explanation regarding public approval
- Your opposition
- Supporting example
- Additional opposition in support of the example

Your current presentation highlights only your point of view throughout. If you wish to use the 4 paragraph format instead of the 5 paragraph format, then your discussion needs to use the above paragraph format instead. The reason you have to do this is because the discussion states that there are 2 points of view. The 2 points of view are the public opinion. As such, the public opinion must be expressed and explained (Discuss both points of view) along with your personal point of view regarding the given reason (discuss your point of view). Your essay did not represent the said format in its discussion presentation.

Remember to use group pronouns for the public point of view to indicate a clear separation of discussion ideas. Use a first person pronoun when you begin to discuss your personal opinion. You cannot use general statements in this presentation as the discussion instruction and the GRA scores require you to use the pronouns to clearly explain your discussion points in relation to the original prompt.

in the end, it will be the formatting errors, that lead to under developed explanations and examples that would pull down your overall essay score. That is, aside from the other grammar issues existing in your written work.

Some grammartical and spelling errors are as follows :
- It should be "Whilst being able to choose subjects freely ... ".
- "receives".
- The verb "opt" usually goes with "for" (opt for sth)
- "...to strengthen their expertise." You 'd better use "improve" instead of "strengthen" in this context.
- "communication skills"
- "...ignore crutial ones..." I think you mean "crucial".
- " ... for the purpose is ...". You can't use verb to be here. Instead, you can use "for the purpose of", "with a view to","in order to".

- "... they are inadequate science ...". It is " ... they have inadequate..."