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IELTS task 1: Unpaid works and people who squander time on them!



Vns9x 102 / 230  
Feb 20, 2015   #1
The diagram below shows the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories. (Unpaid work refers to such activities as childcare in the home, housework and gardening.)

Describe the information presented below, comparing results for men and women in the categories shown. Suggest reasons for what you see.

You should write at least 150 words.
You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The diagram provides a breakdown information of the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people, of which carry children from 1 to 2, 3 and older and without children. The diagram is measured in hours.

It is noticeable that the married women have a tendency to spend more time on unpaid works, whilst the married men possess the opposite story.

A closer look at the data reveals the three types of married women, which allot an ample time to the unpaid works. Married women with 3-year-old and older child ranked as the highest with their roughly 60 hours a week. The second candidate with the lower hours is the married women with a child from 1 to 2 years old. Their hours reached 50. The last type of married women spent only 30 hours on unpaid jobs.

In regards to married men, obviously, they cannot distribute their time for the unpaid works as much as their wives. The data suggest married men with 3 years old and older child worked for 15 hours per week. The gap between all types of married men is about an hour. As a result, married men, who do not possess offspring spend 17 hours for unpaid works, more than married male with kids from 1 to 2 years old by an hour.


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EF_Alyssa - / 7  
Feb 20, 2015   #2
This is very good! Your analysis is very clear. I've just recommended a few changes in the wording, to make your meaning clearer for your reader.

, of which carry children from 1 to 2, 3 and older and without children

This phrase is a little unclear. Perhaps try something like: by people who with children aged 1-3, and by people without children.

more time on unpaid works, whilst the married men possess the opposite story.

"Works" should be "work" (this happens again in the next sentence). To simplify the second part of the sentence, try: while with married men the opposite is true.

3-year-old and older child

To clarify, swap the order: married women with children three years old and older...


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