The use of the internet has brought many problems.

In recent year, the proliferation of the Internet has certain effect on people life. This can result in many issues, which calls for possible solutions can be adopted.

Accessing the Internet can lead to several problems. One problem could be that the personal information of users can be stolen by scammers. For example the Internet scam can steal the users' account bank when they log onto the non-reliable shopping websites. This has a negative effect on user security and lead to huge financial loss. Another problem could be that the participants may become the addicted of Internet.Because they spend a long periods time on the Internet and do not care everything around. As a result, they more and more lead to sedentary lifestyle and no longer have enough time to do their work.

There are a number of measures which can be taken to solve this issues. One solutions could for the environment to introduce heavier laws which will improve the Internet security. This can be done by banning sites that are dangerous for citizens and punishing hacker and Internet frauds. Another solution could be for the Internet provider to reduce user online time which will help them not to use the Internet so much. To achieve this, they can advise the participants to not surf the Internet when they use it over three hours per day and encourage them to participate extracurricular activities.

In conclusion, the development of the Internet can lead to a number of problem and there are several actions can be taken to address these issues.

hi, this is my feedback for your essay:
I think in the introduction paragraph you should clarify what the problems and solutions are instead of making it general
and i saw some of your grammatical mistakes such as:"One solution for the government could be to" instead of "One solutions could for the environment to"

Hi! There are some grammartical errors in your essay :

"...encourage them to participate in extracurricular activities."

"... has a certain effect on people's life"

"...may become the addicted of Internet"

"...spend a long period of time on"

Hope my suggestions useful!

Hi, I found some grammartical errors in your essay:
-which calls for possible solutions that can be adopted. A sentence cant have 2 main verbs so we have to add "that" into it.
-One problem could be is that the personal information of users can be stolen by scammers.This sentence doesnt have main verb.
- non-reliable -> unreliable.
Hope my suggestions useful!

Your restatement did not directly respond to the questions being asked. There are 2 questions that require you to outline your discussion topics in your response. The questions are:

- What do you think are the main problems associated with the use of Internet? ( You should have provided 2 connected problems in response to this question)

- What solutions can you suggest? ( Again, you should have directly responded with the 2 solution topics you would be discussing in the presentation)

The lack of the direct response prevented you from creating a truly informative prompt paraphrase. Your first paragraph should have had 3-5 sentences in it. Your presentation would have been more thorough in that paragraph had you provided the discussion topic outline in direct response to the questions.

Always start the paragraphs with a topic sentence. That way your essay presents a more precise discussion. Since your C&C score will be based on how well you connect 2 discussion topics in a single paragraph, you should use 2 related topics. For example, topic 1 could be about identity theft, and topic 2 could be about how people have a hard time proving that their identity was stolen online so any purchases made are not the real owner's to pay for.

Rather than relying on the word "another" for your transitions, try to use transition sentences like, "A secondary problem in relation to identity theft is..." By the way, do not use the conjunction "because" at the start of the sentence because it is a word connector. It can only be used when connecting ideas, phrases, or words.

The concluding paragraph is inefficient. It does not provide a proper reverse paraphrase of the previous discussion points. It should also be 3-5 sentences long.