The use of social media is replacing face-to-face interaction among humans

face-to-face contact among people becoming increasingly rare

The use of social media is replacing face-to-face interaction among many people in society.

Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

In this day and age, development of mass media has played a vital role in spreading knowledge and connecting people all over the world. It is said that social networking platforms have a propensity to replace face-to-face contact among people in society. Although this trend is without disadvantages, the advantages will justify these.

On the one hand, communicating via social media presents an unprecedented paradox. With advanced technologies, people are more favoured to keep in touch with their family but also potentially disconnected to them. Platforms such as Facebook, Instagram, Tweeter have developed a communication tool that allow its user to contact, share information of each other without paying any visit. This may create negative impacts on the relationship between an individual and their relatives.

On the flip side, social media has its advantages. Communication is no longer restricted because of geographical barrier since mass media facilitates the interaction among people, enabling them to contact on a 24/7 basis. With solely a click, people can join international network and started chatting, sharing experience or even debating about certain issues. Additionally, social media contains a great deal of knowledge, hence, information exposure become more approachable. Individual can learn at anytime without using conventional method which an educational mentor is required.

In conclusion, although social media may affect people to some extent, I believe that its upsides are more beneficial to society.

I cannot review this essay. It is only 230 words. There is a 250 minimum word requirement. This essay will receive so many points deductions for being under the word count that it will not have a passing chance. There will be points deductions for the missing words that would have totaled 250 and, there will also be deductions for the LR, GRA, C&C sections. As such, this essay does not properly represent your ability to write a complete essay. The examiner will mark you down so badly on all fronts that you cannot reach the 5 band score.

So, I suggest that we forget you wrote this essay. Come back to this forum with a Task 2 essay on a new topic, with over 250 words. Then I'll consider reviewing your work and giving you proper pointers. I simply refuse to give you corrections on an essay that I know does not properly represent your writing skills. Take this 2nd chance I am offering you. You won't be sorry.

I think your essay is OK, but there are a few mistakes.

"mass media facilitates the interaction among people"
" social media has its advantages"

The problem is media is a plural noun, its singular form is medium. You add "s" to the verb after "media" all over the essay. This definitely will decrease your grammar score.

" Although this trend is without disadvantages, the advantages will justify these."
I don't know what do you mean. If I translate it would be "This trend has no disadvantages, the advantages will justify it"
And then, you have one paragraph mentions about the disadvantages, so this statement is wrong".
I would fix "Although some disadvantages arouse with this trend simultaneously, its disadvantages definitely outweigh them"

"advanced technologies". There is no problem, but I recommend "cutting-edge technology". This is like a phrase.

Most important thing is you should support your last statement with example. "social media contains a great deal of knowledge"
You will have sufficient words for the essay and increase your TA score. Every statement has to be expanded. You can talk about some sources that help you learn English such TED, National Geographic, and CNBC News.