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Timcago 8 / 4  
Feb 16, 2008   #1
The Vacuum - Analytical Essay

Expressing emotions full of loneliness and sorrow through writing is a difficult undertaking -- especially when it involves the death of a companion who has spent countless hours with you, and brought so much meaning to your life. Howard Nemerov attempted to express such emotions in his poem titled; "The Vacuum." The speaker of the poem has lost his wife, but instead of simply stating, "My life is meaningless without my wife and I miss her so much.," he uses figurative language to reveal his current state of mind. Howard Nemerov uses personification, metaphors, similes, sensory details, and poetic structure in "The Vacuum" to allow the reader to experience, through visualization, the emotions involved with losing ones wife, enabling the reader to react to the agony.

Personification is defined as a figure of speech in which a thing, quality, or idea is represented as a person. In "The Vacuum," personification is used throughout the poem, allowing the author to use a vacuum cleaner to parallel the feelings that the husband had for his wife before she died, as well as the feelings he has now that his wife has passed away. Personification is foreshadowed on lines seven and eight when it says, "But when my old woman died her soul/ Went into that vacuum cleaner." To the husband, the vacuum is his personified wife. On line two it reads, "The vacuum cleaner sulks in the corner closet," suggesting that his wife/vacuum, refuses to speak to the husband because it is offended by all of the "filth" (11) in his present life; filth that wouldn't be there if she was alive. This argument is supported with further personification in lines three through five when its states, "its mouth/ Grinning into the floor, maybe at my/ Slovenly life, my dog-dead youth." The vacuum seems to be 'grinning' at him, amused by how pathetic he has become. Not only is personification an important tool in "the vacuum," but the author also utilizes metaphors.

The vacuum itself is a metaphor alluring to the vacuum in the husbands' life that opened after she died. Without the company of his wife his "house is quiet now" (1). He has no one to talk to at home, and the vacuum cleaner, which to him is a remnant of his wife, "sulks in the corner closet" (2). What once was an active social life full of fulfillment has dwindled down to stagnant loneliness. Line eleven starts with the metaphor, "there is old filth everywhere," comparing how his wife "used to crawl, in the corner and under the stair," (11) to clean up the filth, but now the filth is building up, and without the presence of his wife he does not have the will power to clean it himself.

Similes are another figure of speech that Nemerov's uses throughout the poem to further the depth of the husbands emotional state. Nemerov writes, "Its bag limp as a stopped lung (3), to draw a comparison between the inactive vacuum bag and inactive lungs. Breathing lungs symbolize life. No longer does the vacuum, or the speaker's wife, breathe with life. This simile contributes to the vacuum's personification of his wife because the vacuum is a living, breathing entity to the husband. Line eight and nine state, "I can't bear/ To see the bag swell like a belly." The simile and personification in those lines suggest that when the husband vacuums he experiences déjŕ vu, causing him to re-live the day his wife died. The sensory details in lines nine and ten possibly allude to his wife's death being painful. Line nine continues with, "eating the dust," (9) a phrase that sounds very similar to biting the dust, which is a metaphor for dying. While the vacuum is eating the dust he may remember when his wife was "beginning to howl" (10) because she was dying in pain. The final simile concludes, "life is cheap as dirt" (13). "Cheap as dirt" symbolizes how the husband feels without his wife; his life's worth is as valuable as dirt in her absence.

Poetic structure in "The Vacuum" is strategically written to maximize the emotional affect on the reader. The author did not implement a rhyming scheme because rhyme would strip the poem of its depressing, but necessary, atmosphere. A depressing atmosphere is critical because you would not accurately visualize the husbands emotional state if you were distracted by a cute rhyming scheme. Repetition, like rhyme, is absent in this poem. The author did not want to stress any particular emotion. The stanzas are all five lines long because every line from beginning to end is equally important. "The Vacuum" is also a brief poem. There are so many uses of figurative language that fifteen lines are all that's necessary to keep your mind occupied.

Nemerov's use of personification, metaphors, similes, and structure puts me into the husband's perspective. When I read the poem, I see the vacuum in the corner closet through the husband's eyes, and feel his overwhelming emotions of loneliness, shame, anger, and despair. I hear the noise of the vacuum in his head as he is having flashbacks of his wife crawling "in the corner and under the [stairs]" (12). The metaphors allow me to sense his "hungry, angry heart" that "hangs on and howls, biting at the air" (14-15). The similes provide clues to the nature of her death, and the poetic structure melts it all together into one big picture.

Hope it is good : )

EF_Team2 1 / 1703  
Feb 17, 2008   #2
Greetings!

Your hopes are realized; it is, indeed, good! :-) I have a few editing suggestions for you:

in his poem titled, "The Vacuum."

the emotions involved with losing one's wife

Not only is personification an important tool in "The Vacuum," but the author also utilizes metaphors. - Make this the first sentence in the next paragraph.

The vacuum itself is a metaphor alluding to the vacuum in the husbands' life that opened after she died.

He has no one to talk to at home, and the vacuum cleaner, which to him is a remnant of his wife, "sulks in the corner closet" (2). - You've already used this in the paragraph above.

Similes are another figure of speech that Nemerov uses throughout the poem to further the depth of the husband's emotional state. -

"Its bag limp as a stopped lung" (3), to draw a comparison between the inactive vacuum bag and inactive lungs.

you would not accurately visualize the husband's emotional state if you were distracted by a cute rhyming scheme.

Great job!

Thanks,

Sarah, EssayForum.com
OP Timcago 8 / 4  
Feb 17, 2008   #3
Thank you, that helped a bunch.

I decided to extend my metaphor paragraph since it was to small, but my addition seems like it may have errors.

The most powerful metaphor in the poem describes a "hungry, angry heart/ [that] Hangs on and howls, biting at the air" (14-15). These lines, which are the last two lines of the poem, are very ironic because throughout the poem he practically describes his wife's presence in the vacuum as such, but in reality, is it he whose heart is hungry for her attention, angry about her death, barely hanging in there emotionally, and wishing he too, was dead.

^Is that correct? Is there a better way to write that?

Also, since i quoted the line "hungry, angry heart/ [that] Hangs on and howls, biting at the air" (14-15) in that body paragraph do i have to use quotation marks again in the conclusion? Or should i?
EF_Team2 1 / 1703  
Feb 18, 2008   #4
Greetings!

I think that's an excellent way to write it! You've done a good job of looking behind the metaphor. Regarding quotations, yes, any time you are quoting from a source directly, that is, using the author's words and not paraphrasing, you must enclose the quote in quotation marks (no matter how many times you use it).

Great work!

Thanks,

Sarah, EssayForum.com


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