I am going to examine both point of views.
You have to see how the questions go on. This is not "both views", but two questions to answer.
Para 2: explain why people need music
Para 3: how much you agree/disagree with the statement "traditional music is more important than international ones."
These two paras should be closely aligned with
many different types of music in the world today
. This is the next task to do.
traditional music has more essentials than the modern music
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Possible suggestion: traditional music has more essentials than
does the modern music