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IELTS: Visits abroad by UK residents by purpose of visit


upinipin 32 / 49 1  
Apr 22, 2014   #1
The tables show visit abroad by UK residents by purpose of visit. Many people visit UK with many purposes in fourth years. UK is one of many good countries to visit. UK was a good resident to visit. People in many countries visit for holiday. This number of visit increased in fourth years. The most destination of visit broad by UK residents was Western Europe.

The most purpose people visit UK was for holiday in fourth years increased about 10.000 people visits. This number was equal with the second table shows. There are increasing destinations of visits western Europe. People visited UK by purpose business 3155 people increasing in fourth years at 3957. Purpose for visits to friends and relatives at 2689 people rose sharply until 1998 at 3181.

In along from 1995 to 2005 people visit UK with other reasons only few but in 1997 were 1054 people visit for other reasons this ware higher than other years. Compare with second table destination of visit abroad in Western Europe ware at 23661.

Overall, Western Europe actually in UK many people visited for holiday.




Eva Novita Sari 47 / 71 2  
Apr 22, 2014   #2
In along from 1995 to 2005 people visit UK with other reasons only few, but in 1997 were 1054 people visit for other reasons this ware higher than other years.
BOMAT_IRA 29 / 40  
Apr 22, 2014   #3
Compare with second table destination of visit abroad in Western Europe ware at 23661.
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,208 476  
Apr 22, 2014   #4
In along from 1995 to 2005(not mentioned) people visit UK with other reasons only few but in 1997 were 1054 people visit for other reasons(redundancy) this ware higher than other years. Compare with second table destination of visit abroad in Western Europe ware at 23661(incomplete thought)

Let me give a try:
Getting to Western Europe as a popular tourist destination, more than a thousand tourists went abroad for other reasons from 1996 to 1997. In 1995, it was 896 visitors. This showed a rise in total numbers.
Eva Novita Sari 47 / 71 2  
Apr 22, 2014   #5
Purpose for visits to friends and relatives at 2689 people rose sharply until 1998 at 3181.
BOMAT_IRA 29 / 40  
Apr 22, 2014   #6
Purposefor visits to friends and relatives at 2689 people rose sharply until 1998 at 3181.
Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
Apr 22, 2014   #7
Yes, follow dumi's advice on structuring your writing for this task. It is important that you have those three features in your writing - Introduction, Overview, Details

The mostmain purpose people visitof UK travelers was for holidayholidaying and in fourthfifthyearsyear, the number of travelers visiting other countries for holiday purpose increased about10.000people visits.20700.

I didn't find any information with regard to 10000 visitors. You have to be very careful when you write the detail paragraph and should deal with the accurate figures.


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