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The volume of goods in million tonnes in United Kingdom, years 1974-2002



Beauty17 56 / 79  
Nov 7, 2016   #1
The graph above shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.

The line graph shows information about the quantities of goods in million tonnes based on four different types of transports from 1974 to 2002 in the UK. Overall, there has been an upward trend in various modes of transport figures over the period and the most significant growth was road.

During this period, transfer of goods by rail and pipeline only under 50. Between 1974 and 1994, the amount of items in pipeline rise gradually From 5 to 25 then steady until 2002. In contrast, the figures of pipeline was an annual decrease until reached the bottomed at 30 in 1994. However, in the next quarter, it increased by more than 10 and reached a peak at 42 in 2002.

The transportation by water stood at 38 while road 70 in 1974. Then, there was a slight increase for both until 1978 and followed by went up a lot to 58 for water while road decline slightly in 1982. There was remained constant for water before 1994 but then fell back to 55 in 1998. Meanwhile, road increase enormously, although there was fluctuation before it achieved the highest at 94 in 2002.


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Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15384  
Nov 7, 2016   #2
Merieza, there is an incomplete overview in your opening paragraph. You must always present at least 3 sentences in each paragraph in order to display the impression that you understood the information you were presented with. The increased sentence count also allows you to better represent the complete information as per the graph presentation. There is also a lack of a proper concluding statement. Without the proper recap or repeated summary at the end, the requirements of the essay format are not properly met. The information presented is not smooth and lacks the proper reference words in order to create a proper flow of conversation and representation of the unit of measurement used in the graph. That unit of measurement must be consistently represented in the information because without it, the reader gets lost regarding the measurements being presented.


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