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Walking or Riding a car - people's choice illustrated in the table


WasishaSisha 16 / 20  
Oct 30, 2016   #1
The given table illustrates the average length of travelled per person per year in 1985 and 200 measured by miles. The traveling could count by walking and riding a car. Overall, it can be seen that people made traveling with a car had become a common way instead of walking.

To begin, it was noticeable in early period that people prefer to ride a car. It proved that the number the used of car in 1985 attain to 3.199 miles away. On the other hand, after 15-year period, the car proportion continuously arose at 4.806 miles in 2000. The difference between 1985 and 2000 was 1607 miles.

Another method that people utilized to travel around was by walking. In 1985, walking way stood at 255 miles. It reversed from the proportion of people that utilized car to travel. There was slight decrease from the former year, it is 237 miles away and lessened until 18 miles in 2000.

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Hujjatul19 45 / 70 3  
Oct 30, 2016   #2
Hi Washisha, here is some suggestions for you

... the average length of travelledtravelling per person per ...

... that people preferred to ride a car.

It proved that the number the used of car in 1985 attain to 3.199 miles away.
you may say
It was proved by the distances travelled by car in 1985 attained to 3.199 miles.

Overall, you have a good report.
Keep writing. Best Regards.


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