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"Who wants to be a millionaire?" - a popular TV Show



alexg7g7 1 / -  
Apr 21, 2013   #1
Hi everyone, I want to improve my english skills so I came up with an idea. I decided to watch a random documentary everyday to improve listening skills and then write a small summary about it to improve my writing skills. Every criticism is accepted.

Television plays a significant role in today's society. Most kids and adults prefer to spend their free time watching TV series or shows. A very popular and successful show is "Who wants to be a millionaire?"

There was an episode of that show where the contestant cheated his way to the million. That specific episode was never shown on TV. The contestant's name was Charles Ingram, a British army major. Charles came to the show with his wife Diana who has also competed in the show. Charles answered the first questions with ease but at some point he struggled so is used two of his three helps early-on. The episode due to its length limit came on and. The recording would continue next night.

It was almost impossible for the competitor to answer the next, usually difficult, ten questions correctly so he came up with a plan. He would cheat. The basic idea was simple. He would slowly go around the four posible answers and when he said the correct one, his wife would cough. Through the game the show directors started being suspicious about Charles' behaviour. In some questions although he was certain that the correct answer was A for instanse, his final answer was something else simply because he heard the cought in another answer. Not only he was cheating, but he was also a terrible actor in my honest opinion. He was doing the exact same thing everytime, saying the answers slowly and in some cases although he heard three coughs he was still not sure and reapeted again the procedure. Right after he heard the fourth and last cough he gave his final answer.

But he did it. He answered the last question correctly and won 1 million pounds. Hopefully the crew of the show spotted this strange behaviour and caught Charles. They went to the court and Charles' million never gone home.

rko029 4 / 9  
Apr 21, 2013   #2
struggled and used....
the episode due to its length come to an end.
to answer the next question because of its difficulty.
ten questions were answered correctly,
that leads him to come up with a plan based on cheating.
heard the cough in another answer
not only he was cheationg,but also he

Good Luck :)
dumi 1 / 6793  
Apr 24, 2013   #3
Charles answered the first questions with ease

Charles answered the first few questions with ease.
You say there had been an episode where the contestant cheated and it was not shown on TV. Then comes the Charles's story. Then you say;

The episode due to its length limit came on and. The recording would continue next night.

These ideas are very loosely connected and that disturbs your flow. You need to set up strong links between your ideas. If you start a totally new idea, move to a fresh para.

Also, if you write these for practicing English writing, there is another good way to do it. Pick up IELTS or TOEFL topics (you can find loads of them here on EF)... They are simple topics that can help you express your ideas clearly and in a structured manner. I guess it helps a lot for improving one's English writing :)


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