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Water is a valuable resource for human and government has to control the water usage



Wiwik Mujahidin 21 / 3  
Apr 10, 2016   #1
As water is a valuable resource, governments all over the world should control how much water their citizens use?
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?


Water is the source of the living and it is a valuable source for human in their daily activity. It is argued that government in the worldwide have to manage using of the water and some people say that reverse. I strongly believe that the government should control the water use since needs of water increase continuosly to fullfill necessary population and factory.

The government have to manage the water use of the world. This is because the population of people increase significantly and it gives impact of the water use. For example, in Asia, several countries show the significant incease of the population and it means they need more water in their activity. The necessary of the water rise everyday, but the source of the water decrease countinuesly. The using of the water have to be controlled.

In the second reason, why government must control the water use hence in the worldwide many factories need water for their production particularly in the develop country. For example, in U.S., the highest average water use in the world is the U.S, at 6000 liters perday.(The United Nation Human Development). They consume much water every day, and it can imperil another countries which is near from it since they take water supplies from other countries to their country. It impairs other countries in their neighbourhood.

To sump up, the government should control use of the water because the population of human increase dramatically and the factories use much water. Where possible, people have to keep the environment to the future.

Anaguna 21 / 26  
Apr 10, 2016   #2
Hello wiwik, here my suggestion for your essay in the third paragraph, hope you can improve your writing skill by seeing my sentences.

In the second reason, why government must control the water ...

"In the second reason, the government has to control the water usage in the worldwide since there are many factories utilizing its sources for the process of production things. For example, in the US, the highest average of using water is 6,000 liters in a day. The citizens consume much water every day and it can be a danger for lack of water supplies. "
nelarizka79 16 / 21  
Apr 10, 2016   #3
The government have to manage the water use of the world. This is because the population of people increase significantly and it gives impact of the water use.

... countries show the significant incease of the population and it means ...
The necessary of the water rise everyday, but the source of the water decreasecountinuesly. The using of the water have to be controlled.

Hi, I would like to share any correction regarding your essay.
I think it would be better if you write it like this.

The government has to...
increases..
an impact/ a huge impact/ several impacts..
increase
rises
decreases
..continuously..
..uses


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