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The way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology; IELTS writing task2


Phonepasong 2 / 4  
Jul 12, 2016   #1
Most people generally tend to view things differently, even whether the advancement of technology is gradually changing way of communication in humankind. Although some people claim that technology is an evil that slowly diminishes our humanity, in my opinion, I still believe that it brings everyone closer and helps us to solve many greatest challenges. The following cases and examples will support my point of view.

After coming of the internet which is one of the most powerful technology invented and developed by human, people nowadays generally use it to interact with others by using facebook, whatapp, facetime and etc. They just install those applications in their smart phones or computers connecting to the internet, then they can simply send messages, photos and video calling to their friends or family. For instance, I always call to my friends who are studying aboard by using the said applications on my mobile phone because it is the most convenient and cheapest way to keep contact with them. That's why technology has changed the interact between human and made the world become smaller.

Despite the advantage of technology, there are some negative impacts to our way to interact with each other. People tend to use too much time on electronic devices such as laptops for chatting with their friends at home instead of going to meet them outside. Thus, sometime they might sit in front of computer all day which may cause some health problems. On the other hand, some people think that meeting people by face to face has better feeling than see on the screen.

In conclusion, it is hard to make all people view things in the same way, even in the case of interaction between people has changed due to technology. Some people may agree that technology provide us negative development of interaction between people. However, I still agree that it help us to interact with others easily and keep people closer than before.
yunana 3 / 6 3  
Jul 12, 2016   #2
Although some people claim that technology is an evil which diminishes our life experience , in my opinion, I still believe that ...

... their smart phones or computers connecting to the internet, then they can simply send messages, photos and video calling to their friends or family.

... there are some negative impacts on
payal1982 10 / 19 5  
Jul 14, 2016   #3
Hi Phonepasong,

Please find my feedback and I hope it will be useful

The introduction is little confusing... "even whether the advancement of technology is gradually changing way of communication in humankind"...This sentence need to rephrased

2nd paragraph: I think you can use short sentences to start with. It will decrease the grammatical errors. For example: The first sentence of this paragraph can state...The internet is one of the most powerful technology. It has helped connecting people via facebook. etc

3rd paragraph: meeting people by face to face (don't use by face to face) has better feeling than to see

Conclusion: In my view conclusion should be the point mentioned in paragraph 1 and 2. I see that introduction and conclusion are the same. Different views of people...hard to make people view things in same way

Hope this helps!


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