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West Park Secondary School map. The building experienced a significant change from 1950 to 2010.


Ilmi_03 47 / 69 11  
Aug 30, 2016   #1
The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950.
Summarise the information by reporting the main features and make comparisons where appropriate.


The maps compares the differences of a school building, West Park Secondary School, from 1950 to 2010. Overall, it can be seen that, the building experienced a significant change a six-decade period.

To begin with, the school was constructed besides a house blocks, exactly in front of the main road in 1950. However, the houses were demolished and replaced by car park and science block thirty years later. There were farmland area and playground behind the school initially. As the school extended its building, sport field was built over the farmland.

1980 to 2010 saw that the school has been improving its facilities continuously. While the area of science block and main building remained the same, car park was extended three folds until behind science block. As a result, playground had to share its area to sport field. However, the area of sport field was less vast than playground eventually.




eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,195 459  
Aug 30, 2016   #2
Ilmi_03..., it is good to see you again here with a very good report writing. However, some changes are needed in particular the opening statement. Here it comes:

The maps compares the differences of a school building, West Park Secondary School, from 1950 to 2010. Overall, it can be seen that, the building experienced a significant change a six-decade period.

The development of West Park Secondary School is illustrated in the maps. A significant alteration from 1950 to 2010 was seen in optimization for the schools' various needs. Some public areas for the past 60 years had no changes.

A good paragraph is written at least with three sentences. As you can see, I utterly develop my opening paragraph with that structure.

the school has been improving its facilities continuously

The grammar is correct, but the meaning is illogical. To tackle this, swap the sentence into a passive form. Schools' facilities had been improved massively.

Hope this helps :D
A heap of luck


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