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IELTS Task 1 : Wheat exports


tiaDS 73 / 235 52  
Oct 6, 2014   #1
The line chart illustrates the amount of wheat exports for 5 years, from 1985 to 1990 and is measured in millions of tonnes.

It is noticeable that the total of wheat exports in the three countries fluctuated. However, the figures of European Community and Canada were of a significant increase over the period, while the amount of wheat exports in Australia showed on negatively correlated.

The highest total of wheat exports belonged to Australia in 1985, then followed by European Community standing at just under 20 million tonnes. In term of wheat exports, Australia as the lowest exporter was 15 million tonnes compared to the two other countries.

A closer look at the data reveals that the total of wheat exports in Canada inclined sharply from around 17 million tonnes to 25 million tonnes between 1986 and 1988, a rise of about 13 million tonnes in 3 years. By 1987, the figure of wheat exports in European Community and Australia broke the equal record at approximately 15 million tonnes. Furthermore, by 1989, the total of wheat exports in Canada had gradual rebound to the same amount in 1986 and overtook that for European Community's figure. In any case, the amount of wheat exports in Australia experienced a slow downward until the end of period.

sa1na 9 / 72 19  
Oct 6, 2014   #2
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