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Many women are choosing to have children later in life. Why? Do advantages outweigh disadvantages?

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Sep 16, 2020   #1

women prefer to have a baby in their later age

Nowadays, it is universal that numerous women are deciding to be mothers when they are older. There are several reasons that lead to this phenomenon. However, no matter what is the explanation, I feel its positive are worth considered.

Deeming its understanding, having children at a later time mostly because of the daily expenditure and the modification of community. Firstly, the standard of living is becoming more and more costly. It put a huge pressure for family to make ends meet. In other words, nurturing children imposes tremendous effort, particularly financial requirement, therefore, women tend to be a mother only when she possibly afford her baby. Secondly, as a result of changes society, single-parent households, divorce or independent life from extended family are no longer considered unusual. These things motivate women to have children later when everything is settled down and stable.

Although there are two sides to the increase in the age of women turning into mothers, the advantages are bigger than the disadvantages. First of all, giving birth to later equal to having fewer children. The decline in the birth rate leads to the reduction of population. In simple words, this will help to solve another social issue such as energy consumption, the shortage of natural resources, high demand for education, and health system. More than that, with the strong background of future parents, both financially and mentally, children are born in a well-prepared condition which is a profound contribution to the growth of them.

In conclusion, there are economic and social clarifications that women prefer to have a baby in their late age. Surprisingly, the merits of this difference outweigh its drawbacks due to the benefits from the drop in population expansion also a steady growing environment.
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Sep 16, 2020   #2
While I can sense the contemplation and consideration that you have given to the discussion topic, your inability to write coherently in English appears to be the main problem with your writing. You have a tendency to write sentences that do not have a clear subject or reason. This leads to under developed sentences, resulting in confusing paragraph presentations. You must aim to write more clearly in your paragraphs. Do not try to write complex sentences at this point as you are not capable of doing that yet. Use only simple, short sentences. Do not try to impress the examiner with your English phrases or other things. The less you try to impress, the better your grade will be. Why? Simple presentations mean less grammar errors, which will lead to better overall scoring considerations for you.

You have the potential to become a better English writer. In fact, I can see your ability to clearly analyze the given question, the only problem is in the structure and clarity of your sentences. Try to perform more English language exercises. Focus on simple and complex sentence development. You will be able to improve. Don't rush at this point. Learn at your own pace. Write at your own pace. You don't have to start writing the Task 2 essays at once. Get a feel for English writing first. Use simple story telling writing techniques first. Then work your way up. The important thing is to improve your writing foundation first.
tuanhntta2020 4 / 9 1  
Sep 16, 2020   #3
I think that you should try to divide the main points into separate paragraphs so that it can be easier for the readers to keep track. However, you have quite good understanding of the topic and you have given some interesting points in your essay. Maybe, you just need to work with the structure and the clarity of the essay.

Hope this helps!

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