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IELTS TASK 1: Women and men in Fitness


upinipin 32 / 49 1  
May 4, 2014   #1
The graph shows fitness membership between women and men from 1970 to 2000. Fitness is done by women and men to exercise and build muscle body.
In the end 20th century, fitness membership becomes an assembly that is very attractive for women and men. As we see from the chart, fitness membership as long as 30 years fluctuated.

The women line shows for 30 years fitness membership fluctuated and the average is at year 2000 member per year. The lower number is in year 1970 about 1000 member per year. The higher number is in year 1985 just under 3000 member per year.

The men line shows for 30 years fitness membership fluctuated and average is at 3000 member per year. The higher number is in year 1995 about 5000 member per year. The lower number is in year 2000 abut 1000 member per year.

To sum up, in the end of 20th century at year 2000 fitness membership for men decreased sharply about 1000 member per year. And then, fitness membership for women are fluctuated just under 3000 member per year.



eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,208 476  
May 6, 2014   #2
Well, I think you need to have an overview after the introduction.
Overview is an important feature in report writing for the reader to have a fair understanding about the proceeding contents that he is going to read in more detail.

No overview means you get penalized


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