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Noob in writing 5 / 25  
Feb 17, 2009   #1
This is a paragraph in the beginning of my essay. What I want to say is that even I need to accept what I don't like, I always compromise. Some of my friends said that the words resilient and alacrity were not suitable here. Would someone please give me some advice on how to revise them? Thank you very much!

I appear to be more easy-going than over motivated person in life; whenever faced with anything not to my liking, I always compromise, sometimes even to the degree of being resilient. I often accept disappointing facts with feigned alacrity, hoping my expectation will be met the next time, even if that means hard work and a busy life.

EF_Sean 6 / 3460  
Feb 18, 2009   #2
Your friends are right. Try this: "Easy-going and often unambitious, I find that whenever I am faced with disappointing conditions, I always compromise my desires, sometimes even to the point of passively accepting that I will not get what I want." The second sentence seems to attempt to repeat the first one unnecessarily, so you could just cut it. This is of course merely my best guess as to your meaning, which cannot be easily determined from your original sentences.
OP Noob in writing 5 / 25  
Feb 18, 2009   #3
Thank you very much!

but what do you mean by "I will not get want."?
EF_Kevin 8 / 13053  
Feb 18, 2009   #4
Other ideas:

I assess myself as easy-going, and not uptight or ambitious.

Hey, alacrity is not so bad in the second sentence, but like Sean said it is redundant.

When Sea wrote "will not get what I want," I think it means that you hope your expectation will be met next time, but not this time, so you feign alacrity and stay easy-going. You could just write "passivity":

...even to the point of passivity accepting that I will not get want
OP Noob in writing 5 / 25  
Feb 18, 2009   #5
yes i see, that's what exactly what I wanted to say!

Thanks a lot!
EF_Sean 6 / 3460  
Feb 18, 2009   #6
I originally meant to write "not get what I want," and have edited my original post to reflect that. Kevin's revisions work well, though, and are even more concise.


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