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Work or travel before university; very difficult to resume after discontinuation


nidhishaw 3 / 5 1  
Nov 30, 2013   #1
In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies.

Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

Nowadays, an increasing number of high school students prefer working before they attend university. While this trend is generally endorsed in many western countries such as America, Britain etc. the same does not hold true universally. Countries such as India have different perspective to look at this issue. Taking a break from studies for a year or so for whatever reasons - be it for work or for traveling is not looked at very positively. Needless to say there are differences in thought procedures between the east and west.

In western countries mostly, where students are encouraged to work for a year before starting university studies helps a lot for the overall career building of the students. The students can become self-dependent and they tend to learn the art of living at an early age. Those who want to join university again for higher studies may become more determined by seeing their highly qualified bosses and may study hard in university for getting a good score and proper knowledge.

To the flip side of the situation, working or traveling for a year before university studies may not be a very good idea. Once there is a discontinuation of a something then it becomes very difficult to resume it. Moreover if a student starts earning at a younger age then he/she may be distracted with the charm of money and may not be able to go back to studies again.

Hence, if a student has a firm determination of higher studies then taking a break from studies for traveling or working is not an issue. It may encourage him more to fill his worldly desires by the power of Higher education. On the reverse scenario he may not turn back and go back for university studies.
Arinadeer 2 / 2  
Dec 1, 2013   #2
I'n not professional in writing but from my point of there are some advise for you:
- make bigger our third passage, maybe to add your examples
-give your own opinion in conclusion
MisterWandering 18 / 321 130  
Dec 3, 2013   #3
high school students

high school graduates

While this trend is generally endorsed in many western countries such as America, Britain etc. the same does not hold true universally. Countries such as India have different perspective to look at this issue.

This part is ok but you don't need to give examples in the introduction. I think you should keep it short and direct and save your examples for your body paragraphs.
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
Dec 9, 2013   #4
Countries such as India have different perspective to look at this issue.

.... since you mentioned countries, you should have included at least one more country. Again the word "perspective" means that a particular view or attitude towards something. So, perspective is generally held and here it makes "look at" redundant.

Taking a break from studies for a year or so for whatever reasons - be it for work or for traveling is not looked at very positively.

....Link this line to the previous sentence.
People of these countries do not perceive taking a break form studies for an year or two for whatever reason is a positive trend.

Overall, you write well.... Make sure you don't leave room for those small errors :)


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