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Jun 9, 2021   #1
It's generally believed that success in fields such as art and sport can only be achieved if a person has natural talent. However, it's sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or artist.

Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

It is argued that traning is required for a person to become a star in a genre of sport or art. Nevertheless, there have been such typical persons who have achived a lot by virtue of their own natural talent. Let me discuss both the points of view of this issue in the essay before coming to my ultimate standpoint.

In the first place, innate aptitude definitively contributes a large proportion in the success of many people. It is natural talent of which many geniuses have taken advantages and obtained various success. A good illustration for this is one of the best football players on the world - Messi. He is claimed to have a fascinating talent in playing football when he was a child, and there is no doubt that this kind of skill has noticeably assisted him to be an extraodinary player and to earn a lot of money. Not only football but also other fields such as art emerge similar geniuses, and they prove that natural talent plays such crucial role in success.

On the other hand, accomplishment is not obtainable without intense training and good instruction. One's talent will be likely to disappear if it is not regconized and reinforced. Had it not been for his coaches, Messi would have never achive such reputation and honour. Talent requires a lot of training and striving in order to be completely perfect.

All thing considered, there is no doubt that innate talent is a great advantage for one person to gain success. Nevertheless, a variety of additional elements are essential such as being well taught to make a talent become perfect.
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Jun 10, 2021   #2
sport or art.

Use word replacements for these keywords. You should avoid using the same words as the original in your interpretation.


Wrong spelling - achieved (correct spelling), LR deduction.

Let me discuss both the points of view of this issue in the essay before coming to my ultimate standpoint.

Tell me what your ultimate stand point is for your personal thesis statement. Be direct. Repeating the instructions does not help direct the discussion in a clear way. Accomplish 3 things in relation to the TA:

- Restate 2 public points of view (2 accomplishments )
- state your point of view in relation to the discussion.

Okay, you explained both points of view in a general manner. Where is your personal - paragraph that represents the third discussion requirement? I don't read a reference to it. Expect your score to be non-passing due to the missing 3rd discussion element.Additionally, the 2nd public opinion lacks development when compared to the 1st. Always discuss the public opinions evenly.
Samt Lee 3 / 6 2  
Jun 11, 2021   #3
I think that you should put your own opinion in this essay instead of talking in generall like this.
Additionally, in the first paragragh you should write more about your explaination before taking the example of Messi
The third paragragh is too short and not well-constructed, you should build it like the same way with the first one so that it can increase your cohesion.

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