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quochoa01 1 / 1  
May 9, 2023   #1
Following volcabulary;

rapid increase, level off, slight decline, peak

The line graph shows numbers of fast food time eaten of teenagers consumption in UK from 2000 to 2004.
In term of hamburgers pattern, the general trend is upward. Hamburgers had the lowest percentage of number of eaten in 2000 at 0 percent. Hamburgers experienced the most rapid increase, rising sharply to over 80 percent in 2003 and then slight declined at 80 percent until 2004.

Turning to pizza consumption, the story is different.
The number of time eaten per year on pizza reached a peak of nearly 30 percent in 2001 and leveled off between 2001 and 2002 from 30 percent. Thereafter, the teenagers' consumption declined steady to 20 percent and leveled off until 2004.

In conclusion, hamburgers emerged at the same time showed a gradual rise to around 80 percent, suggesting that it, along with time eaten, will replace pizza as the main sources of fast food every in the future.

*Thank you for watching my essay, have a nice day*
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 14,956 4810  
May 10, 2023   #2
While your English language usage is often problematic and the sentence structure is oftentimes off, you somehow managed to properly use the suggested vocabulary in the discussion points. That said, the essay still comes across as confusing and definitely ESL written because of the way the sentence formations are not normal to an English speaker. Try to practice more sentence completion exercises to address that need.

As far as the word count it concerned, I would have wanted to see you write at least 175 words in the overall essay. Only by writing more would you have a chance to increase your C+C score, which would make up for the deductions in the GRA and vocabulary sections. Yes, even though you used the given words and phrases properly, your basic English grammar was still problematic enough to warrant LR deductions.

By the way, you do not need to conclude a task 1 essay. So you do not need to say "In conclusion". Just stop writing the report when you are done. The examiner does not expect to read a concluding statement as that is not a required scoring consideration of the task.
OP quochoa01 1 / 1  
May 10, 2023   #3
@Holt Thank you so much! I will try my best, Blessings on your day!

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