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Write a definition paragraph of about 150 words to address the following questions: What is freedom?

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Nov 11, 2023   #1
Freedom is not the ability to do whatever you want, which is the strength of character to do what is good, true, noble or right. Freedom without discipline is impossible. Humans want to have liberty because of these following reasons. The first reason is self-determination in our life which means we can make decisions to choose things without dependence on guardians. Besides, we have opportunities to have new experiences which a stable life can not respond well to. For example, when we choose an unsustainable life, we have to go to different places where we can not only travel but also work. The following reason is having challenges for ourselves and improving coping with problems. However, the answer of limitations on freedom is difficult. As a result we must have responsibility, rules to maintain our free lifestyle without being bad for society. Moreover, freedom means making choices and maintaining balance between our individual demands between the general public.
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Nov 25, 2023   #2
The essay is more focused on why people want freedom as opposed to defining what freedom is. The question asks you to define freedom, rather than the reasons people desire freedom. While parts of the essay at the beginning and end touch on this discussion, the middle part, where the discussion matters the most, does not do that. It veered away from the focus and as such, created a diversion in the writing process. That will force the score of this essay to be lower than expected. Remember that you have to stay on track with the discussion instruction to gain a better score. That means, focusing on defining freedom rather than what freedom signifies to people.

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