@Kyet
It is disputed that
=>> It is still a bitter controversy
they can be proud to show it to their friends
=>> they can show it off to their friends
it becomes a difficulty
=>> it is becoming more and more challenging
thus, people can be free to ... Beneficially, it means people do not have ...
I think there is something reverse in the sequence of meaning here. In my opinion, it should be:
=>> Owning a house means that people can benefit from not changing ceaselessly their accommodations like renting a house, thus, they are free to decorate their house with their favorite styles
There are some feedbacks that I think it is helpful for you. I hope you can complete your writing day by day