Wrting task 2 - Foreign students in English-Speaking countries to learn English

where learning English is the most efficient?

I need your help in editing my writing task 2
Title : Nowadays, more and more foreign students are going to English-Speaking countries to learn the "international language - English". It is undoubtedly true that studying English in an English-speaking country is the best way, but it is not the only way to learn it.

Do you agree or disagree with the above statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
You should write at least 250 words

All countries in the world in general as well as each individual in particular almost no verbal confrontation that English take a vital role and how the magnitude and the widespread it is. There is said the most effective absorb this international language that students should study abroad in a nation whose use English daily activities, i agree with this way. Additionally, I think students also can learn English in their own countries such as practice talking English with tourists from English speaking-countries, studying in the Internet.

Regarding to the way going to learn in English speaking-countries really influenced on developing English skills. Apparently, foreign students can improve and advance their English level because they live in a genuine English dialect environment, therefore their speaking, hearing or reading English ability will be consolidated and their mistakes also corrected by native speakers. Furthermore, the factor environment is a tool to motivate international students to use English to communicate because it is compulsory for using the target language all the time because whenever they speak in their mother tongue, there will have no one to comprehend what they say, which is support foreign students become more confident using English. Subsequently, learning in English environment will inspire international students practicing with thinking in English, and also give them opportunities to acquire knowledge from linguistic culture.

Turning to the other ways to learning English, obviously that studying abroad is minimal require about health, finance, scores, hence it is not easy to many foreign students to study in English-speaking nations. Nowadays, due to the popularity of English, there are many schools and language centers are established in students home country, which is give merits for students without worrying, low-self-esteem or homesick because they are studied on their land. Furthermore, students can learning English practice speaking English in some place where attract foreign tourists, or watching movies English such as Friends, how I met your mom or big bang theory to learn idioms, metaphors.

In conclusion, learning English in home country or in English-speaking countries have different benefits for students, which is almost depends on learner's attemptation.

You may want to rethink your word count in the future. 351 words is considered overboard in Task 2 writing. Based on the 40 minute time requirement, you cannot write that many words. Most specially when you consider that all of the sentences that you wrote were just long sentences. Run-on sentences, as these are known, tend to decrease the clarity and direction of your discussions. It causes several points deductions under the GRA and C&C scoring blocks. The examiner will have a difficult time following your flow of thought and as such, might mistakenly mark down your TA accomplishment as well. You don't have to keep the essay very short, but it doesn't have to be very long either. 275-300 words is usually sufficient to allow for editing time during the actual test. Remember, this is not a research paper, it is an opinion paper. Direct discussions that showcase your English comprehension skills matter more to the examiner than you trying to show off your vocabulary and ability to write a lot of English words.

You have a little prompt deviation in your paraphrase paragraph. You needed to indicate a degree of agreement, not just an agreement. Additionally, you were not asked to discuss why students should learn English in their own countries. That caused prompt deviations which will be deducted from the TA score. The best way to score better ? Don't add personal discussion topics and stick to responding to only the prompt question while discussing only information based on the prompt topic.

Each sentence in your paragraph presentation is over discussed but lacking in clarity due to the sentence length presented. Use no more than 5 sentences of moderate length to ensure that you will be able to deliver both simple and complex sentences that represent the following requirements:

- Topic sentence
- Justification
- Justification 2 (optional)
- Example or personal experience
- Transition sentence

1.Introduction part may need to be brief, so that you can reduce the word count.
2.you don't have to give practical example in the introduction part , you can use general words to conclude(ex: There are mainly two reason that I will explain why I think this way.)

3.practice talking English with tourists from English speaking-countries & studying in the Internetcan be your main idea of topic sentence in Para2&3 (also need to be short and clear)

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thank you so much. I will fortify again