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Youth crime due to the lack of social and emotional learning from their parents as the major cause?



fardan10 18 / 24  
Apr 3, 2016   #1
Recent figures show an increase in violent crime among youngsters under the age of 18. Some psychologists claim that the basic reason for this is that the children these days are not getting the social and emotional learning they need from parents and teachers.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion ?


Character building is pivotal things for children developments. As such, some experts believe that youth crime occured due to the lack of social and emotional learning from their parents as the major cause. Whereas, there is another factor such internet or Televison programs which can influence younger people to commit a crime.

There is no doubt that in the modern era, both mother and father have a busy schedule to work in order to earn money. Yet in addition their children need to obtain control and attention from their parents as well. The presence of parents at least can monitor children's activities which will potentially break the rule. A study 2009 in New Zealand published by Principle Youth Court Judge of New Zealand revealed that one of the predominant factors in youth crime is low level of warmth, affection, and closeness between parents and young person. Hence, it is inevitable fact that if emotional learning for children can lead to prevent them to create a crime.

Nevertheless, it cannot denied that in these days there are sorts of crime content are ubiquitous and can be accessed by everyone, includling teenagers. In social media and Television programs, those can be found easyly for them. For example, since the popularity increase of Facebook among the youngster, it recorded that majority of them access certain games such as Criminal Case, War Craft, Counter Strike and so forth which are of violent contents as the most viewer by the teenagers. As a consequence, the teenagers has got an example from those. therefore, it can possibly contribute to lead the youngsters doing a crime.

In conclusion, Although it is crucial for youngster to learn emotional and social learning, another factor contributes to the children's behavior as well. I strongly disagree that emotional learning is a single factor which can lead to the icreasing level of youth crime, it shows that other elements could be possibly correlated to this circumstance.

wahyu 16 / 28  
Apr 3, 2016   #2
whats app ....... your essay is good, i have a suggestion to your introduction paragraph.

you could use this pattern :
1. Bridge ( give some background to the topic to the topic using some fact)
2. Reserve some of the information, paraphrase and use some synonyms.
3. Tell the reader what will be in your essay.

As such, some experts believe that youth crime occured due to the lack of ...

My suggestions :
Character building is pivotal things for children developments. some experts believe that youth crime occurred due to the lack of social and emotional learning from their parents as the major cause. There are therefore several reasons why I absolutely disagree with that statement.


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