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Paragraph on how to do better in college (asking for help in college)


lydever91 5 / 13  
Aug 20, 2010   #1
I am supposed to write a paragraph on how to do well in college or how to do better than previously.

Here is my essay:

When I started college last fall I was always too nervous to ask a professor or fellow student for help. It took me a whole semester and a few not-so-shy classmates in one of my classes that sat next to me to help overcome my shyness. Before school started again I told myself that I would ask for help when I need it, not when Finals are right around the corner. Asking for help is not just something I want to do to improve my work in college, but something to help me for the rest of my life.

t1292 11 / 21  
Aug 20, 2010   #2
Well I'm not sure how serious this assingment is for you but that paragraph is quite short and unemotional. Try swtiching out words for a synonm and see what happens make your last sentence more profound and open with a general statement eithier about your previous year in college or about help.
xosamiixo 1 / 3  
Aug 20, 2010   #3
i think you should add in details that made you do good in your classes. You can say something along the lines of how studying is not a bad thing and it actually works and to know that it is okay to ask questions and talk to people. Maybe starting a study group with people in your class would make you do better because you are doing your work while socializing so its like killing two birds with one stone.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,334 129  
Aug 22, 2010   #4
Use fewer details:
It took me a whole semester and a few not-so-shy classmates in one of my classes that sat next to me to help overcome my shyness. --- this gives less info, but it is such a great sentence.

Hey, this is good, but if you are supposed to be explaining how to do something, that is different from a story like this... maybe you will continue this and add an explanation...

List some strategies for improving your studies. For example, you an use a routine that keeps you studying throughout the day.


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