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Argument essay: Correlation between sleeping habits of employees and profits in firms



sonu123 1 / 2  
Sep 11, 2014   #1
Question :A recent study rating 300 male and female Mentian advertising executives according to the average number of hours they sleep per night showed an association between the amount of sleep the executives need and the success of their firms. Of the advertising firms studied, those whose executives reported needing no more than 6 hours of sleep per night had higher profit margins and faster growth. These results suggest that if a business wants to prosper, it should hire only people who need less than 6 hours of sleep per night."

Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.

Response:
The author's conclusion to correlate the number of hours of sleep and the success of the firms they work in has got some fallacies in various categories ranging from flaws in statistical analysis and inappropriate assumptions and generalisations.

The first and foremost flaw is that the study is conducted on the employees of a particular firm but the result is generalised to all forms of business. The work culture, environment and profit margins are different for different firms and the strategy that works for one firm may not be suitable or fruitful for other firms.There can be a number of other factors weakening the argument since the author has not taken into account other incentives that particular firm gives to the employees.

Secondly, the study is conducted on 300 people only and the conclusion is drawn out from the analysis of their sleeping habits. But this does not strengthen the argument. The author needs some wide variety of data including large number of people from different firms in order to state his argument strongly.

Thirdly, the authors conclusion is based on the assumption that the profit margins and the success of a firm depends only on the sleeping habits of the people working there. But there can be and there are many more factors which the growth rate of business as the skills , education level , diligence of the people and the strategies followed by the firm.

The author just comments on the people who sleep less than 6 hours that they had faster growth, but he has not said anything or conducted any analysis on those who sleep for more than 6 hours and still had higher growth margins. Even fixing this number 6 is questionable since there can be people who require still less number of hours yet perform better.

So , in a nutshell , it can be concluded that the author's argument could have been strengthened if he had incorporated the abovementioned factors and then drawn a generalised conclusion .

xatutik 12 / 29  
Sep 11, 2014   #2
Hey, your essay is quite good. You mentioned important assumptions which argument had not discussed.
Your vocabulary is also good. As for grammar I haven't noticed any major mistake.
OP sonu123 1 / 2  
Sep 11, 2014   #3
thanks please grade me so that i know my level
sonumehta 2 / 5  
Sep 11, 2014   #4
The essay is good but u could have explained in detail
xatutik 12 / 29  
Sep 11, 2014   #5
I have little practice in grading, I'm preparing for GRE myself, but I think you will get 4.5 or so :)
dunguyen 9 / 19  
Sep 12, 2014   #7
Personally I think you successfully draw out assumptions that contain flaws. However, I do think you need to elaborate on the shortcomings of such assumptions and recommend proper solutions.

The first and foremost flaw is that the study is conducted on the employees of a particular firm but the result is generalised to all forms of business

I think you meant the executives of one type of business (advertising) but the conclusion is implausibly applied to all forms of businesses. Nevertheless, this is a very good counterpoint.

the study is conducted on 300 people only and the conclusion is drawn out from the analysis of their sleeping habits.

You can expound on this argument of yours. For instance, sleeping habits of executives may possibly not the sole and implicit indicator of firms' successes. The analysis may fail to address other more characterised features of successful businessmen. This is a typical analogous and hasty assumption.


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