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I am keen on focusing on culture and cultural management for my further study



Charlotte2014 1 / 1  
Oct 30, 2014   #1
My interest in cultural studies, especially in cultural management, has been strengthened through my study in undergraduate years. Majoring in Chinese Language and Literature has provided me with easy access to literary works from different countries, while compared with linguistics and literature research, diverse cultural background and traditions of these works seem to be more appealing to me.

Mainly concentrated on literature and language studies, I also undertook diverse topics such as XXX, XXX and XXX, thereby not only gaining a fundamental understanding of a wide variety of literary issues, but slao a heightened awareness to discuss cultural theories and phenomena through studying diverse literary works as well as other cultural texts, like drama, advertisements and photographs. All of these training enhanced my enthusiasm in subjects related to cultural studies and made it clear to me that I am ready to continue my graduate study in Cultural Management at your prestigious School of Humanity.

Apart from working hard to maintain high GPA in the past three years, I believe I have benefited a lot from my extracurricular activities, among which I found my experience in XXX Folklure Museum and Asian Youth Game were most impressive. In my sophomore year, I spent every weekends working as a voluntary explainer in XXX Folklure Museum, introducing exquisite handicraft works as well as other cultural haritage in XXX. The talk I had with the curator also got me acquintained with some basic facts about museum management and operation, which enhanced my interest in cultural industries. Last summer, I spent all my vocation serving as a volunteer for the second Asian Youth Game which was held in Nanjing. During that period, I worked under the instructions given by Department of International Relations as an assistant for NOC (National Olympic Committee). Besides interpreting for officials and atheletes from China Macau, I was also a member of Department of Publicity, which enabled me to attend news conferences and cultural activities held by NOC. For example, I accompanied our foreign visitors to the Culture Cabin, which displayed unique culture, history and traditions of 45 countries and areas in Asia. This experience has greatly increased my enthusiasm in the cultural activity as I have personally witnessed the magic power it had on people, no matter their differences in sex, race and nationality.

Therefore, I am keen on focusing on culture and cultural management for my further study. As for my career objective, I wish to find a job in a cultural industry. I am not interested merely in becoming a technocrat, instead my professional goal lies in interpreting and communicating cultures for the public. Becoming an organizer or a manager in cultural organizations is my career orientation.

I have particular interest in your programme as I believe your postgraduate training will help me meet both my educational and career goals. In order to further broaden my outlook, I have been aware that I need to study in a more dynamic and comprehensive environment. HongKong, with its unique location, colourful multiculture and easy access to foreign materials, is an ideal place for me to persue my academic dream. Moreover, through the information I have received from your website, I have learnt that you have an excellent program in Cultural studies. Not only do you offer many interesting courses, like Management of Cultural Organizations, Performing Arts Administration, Curating and Managing Cultural Festivals, which greatly meet my interest, but you also provides many opportunities to full development in individual capacity and intelligence. With a variety of disciplines related to cultural studies, your prestigious program enables me to get familiarized with cultural study through array of interdisciplinary perspective, like media, art and cultural industires. It is also attractive to me as you offer practical fieldwork, which helps to expand my outlook in cultural industry.I do believe that the one-year rigorous training in this program will prepare me perfectly for my ideal career in cultural industries in that your programme provides me with the knowledge of culture and art necessary to reach my career and personal goals. In addition, the whole programme is conducted in English and Cantonese, which offers me an excellent opportunity to improve my oral and wirtten skills, thus preparing me better for the future work.

Your university is one of the most renowned learning institutions, with a strong background in culture studies. I believe the postgraduate study at your institution will provide me with the most advanced knowledge I crave, and the best opportunity for me to achieve my goals. On the whole, I am pretty sure that I am now well prepared to start a new academic journey at your esteemed university and will seize every exciting opportunity opening up in Hong Kong.

ANY suggestion about language, grammar, essay structure etc, is welcome! THANK YOU SO MUCH!

vangiespen - / 4077  
Oct 30, 2014   #2
Chen, you should flip your essay around. You accidentally saved the most interesting paragraphs for the last part instead of placing it at the essay so that it became a part of the statement of purpose hook. Below you will find my suggestions for the proper order of your highly interesting and impressive essay.

There are also grammatical errors that need to be addressed within the essay but I always believe that unless we fix the chronological order and content of the essay first, it will be useless to immediately fix the grammar errors. That is because the way the essay is presented can and will still change. Kindly reformat the essay in my suggested manner, if you agree with it that is, so that we can move on to correcting other areas of the essay :-)
OP Charlotte2014 1 / 1  
Oct 31, 2014   #3
well, yes, thank you so much for your advice, I guess the essay looks better after fixing its chronological order. Would you plz give me more advice about other areas of this eaasy as I find your advice is of great value! THX again for your help!
vangiespen - / 4077  
Oct 31, 2014   #4
Chen, since you asked :-) ... I would advice you to develop more information about your participation in the Nanjing Youth Olympics and totally drop the museum reference. The reason I suggest this is that I watched the Nanjing Games this past summer and found the opening ceremony to be a highly interesting and diverse presentation of cultures from across the world. I believe that it would carry a tremendous amount of convincing power because it presents you in an immersed situation related to the masters degree that you are pursuing. Sharing more about this event could work to your benefit because it is your most recent and relevant experience pertaining to your interests in culture and cultural management. If the Olympic Games or Youth Games don't highlight cultural management and culture, I don't know what else will :-)


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