"What we do for ourselves dies with us. What we do for others remains and is immortal" SOP Speech P.

I am applying to grad school for speech pathology. This is just a rough draft. Any help is greatly appreciated! Thank you so much!!

"What we do for ourselves dies with us. What we do for others remains and is immortal." These words spoken by Albert Pine embody my outlook on the field of speech-language pathology. I chose to pursue a career in speech-language pathology because I believe in celebrating small gains, in helping others little by little, and that by improving someone else's quality of life I am enriching my own.

I was not originally drawn to the field of speech-language pathology; I wanted to be an occupational therapist because I wanted to help people. After a few difficult classes that did not grasp my interest I realized that in order to succeed, I needed a major that went beyond my desire to help; I needed one that evoked passion. After taking a few communication sciences and disorders classes I shadowed Susan Schwartz, a speech pathologist at Our Lady of the Elms, and realized that speech-language pathology was the right path for me. It wasn't until I began working at Marion-Sterling, an investment school in Cleveland, that I found my true passion for this field.

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kk, I have a few inquiries listed that , when answered, will help you to further strengthen your statement of purpose. There were some loopholes that an admission officer would find in the essay so I thought it would be best to plug those holes in your statement before we center upon correcting the grammar errors or reinforcing the message of your statement.


- Could you possibly explain more about how you came to this realization through your classes and the shadowing that you did? The reason you should do this is because you have to show or explain how your purpose came to develop into a passion for you :-)


- Exactly how did an investment school inspire your calling for speech therapy? There does not seem to be a connection between finance and speech pathology. You have to expand upon this statement. It will further strengthen your purpose statement when you constantly show or explain how the passion built up over time within you.


- Where did this happen? Talk a little about what kind of feelings you had on that first day and how you felt by the end of the day with Christopher.


- From where? What course? When did you graduate? Why did you feel a need for more studies? These are all part of your purpose.


- Where in Cleveland? Why did you choose to work there? How is it relevant to your purpose for enrolling in graduate school?

I hope I was able to help. I am looking forward to reading your revised statement of purpose, if you choose to do so :-)

Thank you very much for all of your help!

I would love to have you read my statement of purpose. again as soon as I revise it!

Here is the new one!

"What we do for ourselves dies with us. What we do for others remains and is immortal." These words spoken by Albert Pine embody my outlook on the field of speech-language pathology. I chose to pursue a career in speech-language pathology because I believe in celebrating small gains, in helping others little by little, and that by improving someone else's quality of life I am enriching my own.

I was not originally drawn to the field of speech-language pathology; I wanted to be an occupational therapist because I wanted to help people. After a few difficult classes that did not grasp my interest I realized that in order to succeed, I needed a major that went beyond my desire to help; I needed one that evoked passion. My "Introduction to Communication Sciences and Disorders" class helped me decide to pursue speech-language pathology. Our professor's twin brother came to our class to speak. He was choked by his umbilical cord during birth, which resulted in the use of a wheel chair and an augmentative communication device. He spoke about his resilience and the dedication it takes to use an augmentative communication device. His persistence sparked my interest to become a speech-language pathologist. It wasn't until I began working at Marion-Sterling, a school in Cleveland, that I found my true passion for this field. I have always wanted to improve the lives of children and through my work at this school I have been able to see the impact that a speech-language pathologist can have. These children go through unimaginable daily struggles, yet they continue to attend school due to the support of their teachers. Becoming a positive influence in the lives of these students has inspired my calling.

On my first day as a special education paraprofessional, I did not have much experience and I did not know what to expect. I felt in over my head as I incessantly chased around screaming children. This is where I met Chris, a non-verbal child with autistic characteristics. Challenges accompanied the first few days with Chris, I struggled to keep him calm and our communication was non-existent. I felt overwhelmed but I turned to what I knew best, language development and simple sign language. I persistently worked with Chris on one-word utterances and simple signs that went along with our daily routine. Now, Chris is greeting his peers as he walks into the class, saying one word to request and object, and using signs such as help and thank you. Each day that I work with Chris, I see progress. It may be slight and it may be gradual, but watching him successfully accomplish a speech sound is the greatest reward. This experience has helped my interest of language disorders grow. I have been able to work with Chris to improve consonant vowel blends, receptive and expressive language abilities, verbal imitation as well as other skills. Working with non-verbal and language impaired children has shown me what speech-language pathologists can experience.

Now, after working in a school with the type of children I will encounter as a speech-language pathologist, I am prepared to work with each and every type of student to ensure their success. The knowledge I have gained through the hands on experience, as a special education paraprofessional will help me achieve my goals in graduate school and in my pursuit to become a speech-language pathologist. Working at Marion-Sterling with children from low-income households with varying disabilities, has allowed me to find my love for the profession of speech-language pathology, and most importantly, it has allowed me to find my passion for making a difference in the education and success of children. After graduate school, I would like to continue working in school systems that primarily educate students from low-income families.

The rigorous Speech-Language Pathology program at ____________will prepare me for my future as a speech-language pathologist. As a graduate student, I am eager to expand on my experiences and work in a variety of settings. The clinical internships and public school internships at ___________ guarantee that I will graduate as a competent, well-rounded, and versatile speech-language pathologist. The graduate program at ________________ focuses on the skills that I need in order to meet my professional goals. While it is certainly true that ______________ has a lot to offer me, I am also confident that I will be an asset to the graduate program. My undergraduate education at Ohio University, my volunteer experiences, and my work at Marion-Sterling has provided me with the time management, preparation and passion that is needed to be successful in the field of speech-language pathology. After experiencing the satisfaction that comes from helping others learn to communicate, I know beyond a doubt that this is what I want to do with my life and that ____________has the graduate program to ensure my success.

Thank you for your help for my essay, i am not a good writer either so i cannot tell you how to modify, but i think there are too many sentences beginnig with "i", and that does not sound good. Also, if you could put more of your profound thoughts about the purpose in this essay, a little more of philosophical, moral reasons, that will be much better.

Hope this helps you out!