Outline your intersets in pursuing a gradute program (Personal Statement) 200 words.

Provide a short statement (up to 200 words) outlining your interest in the program. Describe the area(s) of research interest you wish to pursue. Describe the reasons for wanting to pursue this graduate-level program, what you hope to accomplish and plans for a professional career.

Personal Statement for an university

Undoubtedly, the University of XXXX is recognized internationally for being a research-intensive university. So, I am really interested in conducting my research in the field of Mechanical and Mechatronics Engineering in this prestigious university and particularly in the Nano and Micro Systems lab and under the supervision of Professor XXX . My reasons behind applying to this program are to conduct advanced scientific researches related to Mechanical and Mechatronics Engineering especially energy-related topics. I will aim to develop new technologies that can be efficiently applied to variety of energy applications. This can be accomplished through the innovative and promising solutions of the smallest scale, the Micro and the Nano scale. In the laboratory experiments, I will work towards enhancing the thermochemical properties of fluids used in automobiles, heat exchangers....etc. For instance, we can enhance the heat transfer in heat exchangers by using nanofluids that can be used in solar power plants. Also, we can improve the mechanical properties of materials used for making wind turbines like Nanocomposite of fiberglass materials. After completing this master program, I intend to obtain a PhD to become a researcher and a professor in the field of Nanotechnology used in the renewable energy field.

Hello Kareem

I think you covered the first three points of the question. But just mentioning that you intend to obtain your PhD can't be enough. I think you need to focus more on this part,how would you use this course professionally to justify and innovate and how would it help with your career plan. Just try to explain it broadly..Hope that would help you

Kareem, remove the word fillers in your statement because the reviewer already knows this suck up information that you are providing. It will just irritate him because you are mentioning things he already knows in such a word requirement sensitive statement:

Undoubtedly, the University of XXXX is recognized internationally for being a research-intensive university. So,
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Your response is already informative so you do not need the above list of words to enhance the essay. Just inform the reviewer directly in order to ensure that he reads every bit of information that you hope to share and impress him with. The last sentence in your statement refers to a continued academic learning rather than the plans for a professional career as the prompt requires. Revise your response to indicate what sort of job you hope to perform after completing this masters degree instead.