Why you are a strong candidate for the Western MFE program?

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What are your key strengths and how will they help you succeed both in our program and after graduation?

All experiences stem from and shape my unique characteristics - eagerness to learn, commitment, never-say-die mindset. Always keeping trying and sparing no efforts in achieving my goals, I believe I'm the kind of person who will definitely succeed in getting what she wants.

What attracts me the most about finance is how the products we use are molded in the mind - financial capital isn't a physical product, it's an intellectual product. When I started studying economics, I was brought into a world of hedge strategies, financial derivatives, and game theory, where sometimes you can counter a lack of skill with a keener mind - the more I studied strategies and the rules of the world, the more I improved.

Four-year study in economics equipped me with solid theoretical knowledge; various academic projects prepared me research and problem solving capability. The broad subject coverage helped me obtain a comprehensive knowledge base to perform in-depth research and application in the topics offered in MFE program and further career.

Experience with entrepreneurship competition provides me with leadership and the pragmatic habit; Internships in finance field as well as part-time jobs across diverse industries helped me acquire great experience in processing and analyzing data. These will benefit my study because my perspective on current economic trend and sensitivity to changes in financial climate allow me to have a sound judgement and agility when facing complicated cases both in the class and work.

I came from China, a strong socialist country with socioeconomic and cultural types of diversity. Studying tremendous and distinctive economic development of China, I can help to sculpt a class of maximum variety not only in race and culture but also in academic background. Coupled with my sophisticated communication skills and my strong adaptability to do teamwork efficiently under pressure, I will have a pleasant cross-culture conversation with others and enhance their experience more profoundly.

Jingyue, you have to consider that you are applying for a masters degree program. Therefore, you should not be placing so much weight on your theoretical knowledge at this point. Masters students are normally professionals who have actual work experience to back up their masters school applications. Do you have any actual work experience beyond internships wherein you displayed actual abilities and talents that can help you succeed in this program?

While you presented a good summary of your academic expertise, I am worried that you do not have enough hands on work experience to support your claims. In the eyes of a reviewer, it is not enough for you to summarize what you think your strengths are, you have to show how these strengths function for you in a real world setting. Aside from that, there is no justification in your essay as to how you hope the strengths you have can help you during and after the program.

You have to think about presenting your strengths in terms of the curriculum options of the school. Will you be a full time student or a course based student? Select the type of student that you will be and make sure to present your strengths based upon the expectations of the specific study direction you will be enrolling in. Think about the summer internship that the program offers. What skills do you have which will tell the reviewer that you will be able to complete the 1.4 year course within the allotted time and that you will pass the internship without any problems? Those are the considerations you should have when discussing the strength of your skills in relation to your masters degree candidacy.