@Holt
Hi, I did a remake on the essay. Could you please help me check on this? Thank you in advance. I really appreciate your help.
(1st Paragraph)The graph illustrates the number of visitors (in thousands) who are visiting The Tabard Towers Theme Park throughout the whole year which is counted per months. Overall, the park has an interesting variation which consists of an increasing trend until the end of third quarter, followed by a gradual decline in the last quarter. However, although the first and last quarter have steady up and down marks, the middle two quarters are interesting because they have erratic fluctuations.
(2nd Paragraph)Starting from January, the park gained a good momentum as it slowly rises from 30000 to 40000 visitors until March. It was then followed by a steady increase to almost doubling up to 80000 people in May. From this point, the erratic fluctuation started where the park reached its lowest point in June.
(3rd Paragraph)In July, the visitors were shooting up again to hit 120000 mark, almost four times higher than the first month. The numbers decreased sharply to slightly under 80000 in August before rocketing to almost 140000 in the next month. After reached the peak, the park's visitor fell back steadily to 80000 people by decreasing up to 20000 visitors a month until December.
Tabard Tower Theme Park