Writing Feedback / IELTS: Climate change is a threat for the earth regardless of people's actions. [2]

Climate change is now an accepted threat to our planet, but there is not enough political action to control excessive consumerism and pollution. Do you agree?

A virtual unchanged climate is necessary for the development of country in the industrial part. The reality nowadays sees that the climate is unpredictable. No one can predict whether summer, autumn, or rainy season attacks to a country monthly. This becomes a threat to our planet such as a research states that there have been seven cycles of glacial advance and retreat, with the abrupt end of the last ice age about 7,000 years ago marking the beginning of the modern climate era and of human civilization. Most of these climate changes are attributed to very small variations in Earth's orbit that change the amount of solar energy our planet receives; the political action does not support to tackle the excessive consumerism and pollution, however. It was proven from both sides, school that lacks explanation for the students to respect the environment and planet, an industry which has no pressure to develop responsible environmental. While government has provided sophisticated tools to solve the climate changes, I strongly argue that there is no fixed-punishment from government to control this case based on the truth that wide pollution has existed for decades in this world.

Several causes of the current global warming trend could be probably emerged in climate change problem. First problem is human expansion using "greenhouse effect". It is warming result when the atmosphere traps heat radiating from Earth toward space. Certain gases in the atmosphere block heat from escaping. Long-lived gases that remains semi-permanently in the atmosphere which does not respond physically or chemically to changes in temperature. It described as forcing climate change. Gases, such as water vapor which increases as the Earth's atmosphere warming make some of the most important feedback mechanisms to the greenhouse effect. Coming second is unpredictable weather patterns such as extreme events. The extreme events often happened to almost all countries in this world. For instance, the number of high temperature event records in the United States has been increasing, while the number of low temperature event records has been decreasing, since 1950. The societies witnessed increasing numbers of intense rainfall events. And the next problem is going up sea levels. Global sea level rose about 17 centimeters in the last century. The rate in the last decade, however, is nearly double that of the last century.

In the other hand, the good lifestyle is having high level of consumerism. As a result, the industrial emissions of gases keep their existence in working, and it means that people created much pollution. Definitely, it attacks the planet. Conversely, the political action does not control the consumerism and pollution. This could be proven in school that lacks specific lesson to encourage respect for the environment and planet. An obvious example, many students use papers to write and they need more books which are made by papers. As the reality papers are made of wood. The more consumers use wood for their products, the fewer trees grows in the world. So the planet would be worse. Also, the industrial emission of gasses does not get a strict policy for their accountable actions such as they do illegal mining and it would attack the earth. Conversely, the government should provide a curriculum which tells how to keep the student's behavior for the global world in order to describe a respect to the earth. Therefore, making a new policy about industrial emission of gasses' legally accountable in the actions should be held by government. So, people do not freely utilize the world's wealth.

The aforementioned evidence examines that climate change is a threat for the earth regardless of people's actions. In my personal argument, government should have main role in political action to control and tackle this case latter. Where possible, both government and society should take a part from this case. The more dangerous earth's condition is, the worrier people are. It could be better to save the earth from now on.

Writing Feedback / IELTS: Arts are crucial to government to gain successful incomes by some events [3]

Government investment in the arts, such as music and theater is a waste of money. Governments must invest this money in public services instead.
To what extent do you agree with this statement?

All parts of aspects in this world are a thirst for government's investment, which determine the development of country. Spending money for the art activity like music and theater is not a prominent thing that government should do because that is only for entertainment. Some people argue that it could be better if government uses the money for public services; however, I argue that art gives several merits for the government from its tax. Therefore, this essay will discuss how government invests nation's wealth for both sides; public services and arts.

In this modern era, government undoubtedly plays the key part to the development of country for all sides. Arts are one of governments' investments. Not surprisingly government provides amount of money for the successful events of art such as music and theater. This may be only entertainment purposes but this would be benefits for government to gain money. In celebrating some events, the provider should pay a tax to the government. That is incomes for government. An obvious example that could be taken for this case is carrying out a concert which invites some overseas' artists. This is surely authentic that government spends much money for this event but on the other hand, this obtains a tax to government. The more viewers of concert come, the more profits government will get. To prevent the negative point of view of wasting money for the art events, government should pay attention more to the art creators because they can bring the nations' name.

However, public services take important role in the development of country. First, public service like transportation has many problems. This can be seen from how transportation is functioned by government. For example, in Asian countries such as Indonesia, still operate the proper transportation that makes the passenger feel uncomfortable. Second, the minimum number of health clinics especially in the coastal area of country needs more investment from government. To illustrate this, the poor still find difficulty to get medicine or doctor when they are getting sick. As the results, the amount money of country should be given for solving that problem of country in public services rather than to art services.

Ultimately, the arts are crucial to government to gain successful incomes by some events. Government should support the art events to attract young people to love the nation, and enhance the public services to be enjoyed by the societies. In my personal argument, both art and public services give some merits for the nation, and the problem is how the government could take a fair part from this case.