Writing Feedback / time spent for studying and playing [6]

Can anyone help me to develop my ideas? I haven't finished my essay

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It is very important that children should study hard at school. Time spent playing sports and having fun is time wasted. Do you agree?

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Every child is expected to study hard at school. They seem to have little time to play sports and have fun. Is it good for them? Studying too much makes children feel tired and difficult to concentrate on their lessons. They need to relax and do what they are interested in.

Playing on school sports teams and participating in clubs after school is essential for childhood development and socialization. Children need to socialize with their peers, their parents and other people to learn other experiences which they cannot study at school.

Playing sports encourages children to enjoy studying at school. After playing sports, children are refresh and feel it easier to start study. They may find the lessons interesting and ease to remember. So children should be allowed to do what they like.

Moreover, sitting in one place and studying makes children get fat if they don't play sports

Writing Feedback / "Like father, like son" - children benefits if they are brought up with care, love from their father [4]

Please help me to rate my essay.

Topic: Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic.
Fatherhood ought to be emphasized as mush as motherhood. The idea that women are solely responsible for deciding whether or not to have babies leads on to the idea that they are also responsible for bringing the children up.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?"
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It is really sad that nowadays some children grow up without knowing their fathers. They has suffered from social prejudices and the odium of friends. Children need two parents for their existence and upbringing. By any means fatherhood ought to be emphasized as much as motherhood.

The mother cannot make up her mind alone having a child. And the father has a right to choose whether he wants to have a baby or not. Once they have decided to have a baby, the duties comes both of them. Even when they don't live together, father need to provide financial support to both mother and children, especially if mother is unemployed. Simultaneously, he should look after and find time to play with their children. If a child does not have a father, he will be sorrowful and shy. After all, father is also an important pillar of physical heath and mental psychological which children can turn for wisdom.

Mothers are usually loving to their children while fathers discipline their child learn right from wrong. There are some children who don't have fathers may lead a life as a criminal when they grow up because they lack the discipline and education from fathers. In addition, there are some jobs which children only learn from their father. For example, I can learn how to fix a fan from my father which I do not think my mother can teach . Overall, it is necessary for a child to have two parents to develop perfectly.

"Like father, like son", children can receive best things if they are brought up with care and love from their father. So fatherhood as well as motherhood must be praised and emphasized.

Essays / Modern technology has increased material wealth [5]

Can you help me to find some ideas for the following topic:

"Modern technology has increased materials wealth, but not happiness. To what extent do you agree with this statement? Use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence"

I think about the two ideas:
_ Modern technology has increased materials wealth
_But it doesn't bring happiness

I've search for some information but not find any example or specific reasons.

Thanks very much in advance

Essays / The advent of the Internet - find some ideas [4]

Write a composition of about 250- 300 words on the following topic.
'The advent of the Internet is a twentieth-century change that has strongly affected our life.'
( Use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence)

The twentieth century saw great change. The advent of the Intermet should be remembered about the twentieth century:
_It brodens our knowledge by opening a new window on the world
_ It helps us to communicate with each other
_ It has a great influence on our mind

I think of the three ideas but they aren't good enough. Also can you give me the support for examples?
Thanks very much for your consideration!

Essays / Role for teachers in the classroom and computers - about this topic? [5]

I need the discussion to write the following topic:
As computers are being used more and more in education, there will be soon no role for teachers in the classroom.
Please write whatever you think about it, or express your ideas in some words or paragraph
For example:
_Computer is a part and parcel in our daily life
_ Computer is an indispensable tool (It is not perfect of course, but it hardly makes mistakes)
_ It is now used in many aspects, especially education.
_Students use computers to do their research and make a perfect paper
_ Students often find educational computer programmes more stimulating than other forms of teaching.
_However computers cannot replace teachers.
_Students may play games while using computers
_ Teachers know who pay attention to his lessons or not, who do badly and well in their studies.
_By giving their experience, teachers show students how to study effectively ( studying method)
_Students can ask teachers if there's something they don't understand
_Teachers can tell jokes (/ teach students some songs/ hold some classroom games)
_Teachers stimulate student's curiosity and creativity by giving questions and instruct them to the answers
_Teachers may broaden student's worldview.

Thanks very much in advance!