Zainab110
Apr 15, 2018
Writing Feedback / Ielts 8 test 4 task2: heavier weight and less fitness [4]
I'm not an expert but would like to suggest you some points.
1-Word "heavier" is not correct . You can use word obese .
2-You don't need to add high with calories as you have already written RICH in fats.
3-Which are not only gain weight -> which do not only gain(increase would be better though) weight.
4-these sedentary people is not correct.
5-instead of "salt" use cholesterol as I don't think that salt has any role in weight gain.
6- How sleep would be helpful to decrease the weight?
I'm not an expert but would like to suggest you some points.
1-Word "heavier" is not correct . You can use word obese .
2-You don't need to add high with calories as you have already written RICH in fats.
3-Which are not only gain weight -> which do not only gain(increase would be better though) weight.
4-these sedentary people is not correct.
5-instead of "salt" use cholesterol as I don't think that salt has any role in weight gain.
6- How sleep would be helpful to decrease the weight?