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bhan_msm   
Dec 16, 2009
Undergraduate / Living in a diverse community, Colgate supp essay - comment [4]

Speaking of living in a diverse community,what better place to experience it than India itself. With over 22 official languages,innumerable traditions and festivals as well as unimaginable range of cuisines,it is one of the most diverse country that one is likely to encounter in one's life.Being an Indian I recognize the value and importance of it's diversity and believe that this diversity is one of our main strength and the reason for our unity.

I am from a Hindu origin and believe me,even I dont know the exact number of festivals and traditions in my religion as according to me they are infinite! But just by looking at the enthusiasm and joy everyone feels while celebrating such festivals, even if it is not feom their religion, fills me up with joy and pride at living in such a place.My family has always been very religious and this quality has rubbed off on me as well.I have always been a God-fearing person and have believed that every act,wether it be good or evil, never goes away unpaid.All one needs to do is to be sincere and focussed towards his goals and he will definitely get the results as even luck is with the determined.

It has always been said that "We should learn from the mistakes of others" but why only mistakes! I believe that one can learn much more from the achievements of others than the mistakes.I myself have been really inspired by the works of Mother Teressa and Nelson Mandela.Their work has given me the belief that only good and humane deeds can transform the world.This realization has made me a broad minded person ,not guided by the small and meaningless customs of religious or racial descrimination rather a person with an equal place for everyone in his eyes.
bhan_msm   
Dec 16, 2009
Undergraduate / Why Lehigh University + Equity and Community - Supplement [6]

Even I m writing this essay.You should probably research more and include atleast two specific communities of the University and explain them a bit.If you need help in locating them,I can tell you.
bhan_msm   
Dec 16, 2009
Undergraduate / Lehigh Supplement Essay. Critique and give me a helping hand. [3]

It's a well written essay since you have put your personal life in it as well.But according to me,you have used too much space on the essay for describing your past.You can maybe cut on that and in place of it put any community or activity of the University that draw your attention
bhan_msm   
Dec 16, 2009
Undergraduate / 'Education and student ratio' - Lehigh supplement question-why Lehigh [2]

Since the time I started my preparation for a US education, I was constantly reminded of how the whole process of getting into a University resembled a complex maze and after giving my SAT's ,I too reached the same conclusion.I was completely lost in the application process, not even knowing which Universities to apply to.The only thing I was sure about was that I wanted to pursue Engineering in University.So I started from scratch,searching for the highly recommended and top rated engineering Universities of US.I then cut down that list to only those universities who provided financial aid for international students as my parents are not in a financial state to pay for my abroad education.When going through the websites of these specific universities,I fell in love with one of them,the Lehigh University.Many reasons attracted me to this university.First and foremost of them all was the level of education imparted by Lehigh.It's low student teacher ratio and highly accomplished professors gave a sense of relief even to my parents who have relatively less knowledge in this area.Other major reasons were the various campus resources available for students like the Career Services which relieve the extra anxiety and pressure that a student has to go through.What was even more appealing to me was the health and the safety and security measures that are present in the university which gave an assurance to me that I can live in Lehigh as tension free as in my home.If admitted,I'll try my level best to give back to the university what I owe by participating in various social and academic communities and try and help those who are less fortunate than us.I'll make sure that my deeds and doings do no harm to the reputation of the university and instead people see me as a true Lehigh student.
bhan_msm   
Dec 16, 2009
Undergraduate / Living in a diverse community, Colgate supp essay - comment [4]

my prompt is the colgate supp essay
it goes like this:

We honor the many different forms of diversity in our community. Your perspective is valuable because it comes from your life
experiences, family background, and culture. Please tell us about yourself and what you believe is the best way to share your perspective.
Also, what do you hope to learn from the experiences of others?
bhan_msm   
Dec 20, 2009
Undergraduate / Lehigh Supplement Question- Why Lehigh? and Define Equity and Community? [7]

for your first question,i believe it is a well thought out and well expressed answer.But you should probably look up for more communities and activities that attracted you to lehigh and elaborate some of them as it then gives a good impression of your research of the university and your willingness to join it.

Even I am writing this essay so you can probably check mine and we can both help each other.

for your second question
One day I was talking withto a few family friends when I mentioned that I had an interest in Lehigh University

.They told me that he onceHe went to watch a local soccer game and wore a Lehigh sweatshirt to the game.
As he was watching the game a stranger approached him and asked if weather he attended Lehigh
bhan_msm   
Dec 20, 2009
Undergraduate / The day that I would become the New York City champion in the 1000-meter race. Common app essay [10]

Its a well thought out and expressed essay.
But according to me you should put more feelings into it.
Like for example,rather than telling us about the physical things such as how many meters were left,which position you were at that time etc.you should probably write about how you felt when you were at that stage,your emotions and your expectations etc.
bhan_msm   
Dec 20, 2009
Undergraduate / MIT short answer: something you do for the pleasure of it [8]

It is a well thought out essay on your behalf.To make it just a wee bit more attractive,you can probably add names of any particular student you have helped in any subject.

But overall,If I would have been the administrator,I would have accepted your answer.
bhan_msm   
Dec 20, 2009
Undergraduate / 'different cultural background' - Equity and community-Lehigh supplement [5]

No matter how differently you define "Equity" and "Community" in your terms, it still will have the same essence for its meaning. A community always is a group of persons having common interest or goals and equity refers to the power entrusted to each person in the community so that he or she can help their community overcome difficult situations and problems. Only such communities which have passionate and just people in them, can thrive and sustain any testing circumstances. Furthermore, each person in the community should be weighed in as equal and everyone should have fair opportunities to succeed as only these kind of communities leave their mark on the world by achieving their goals and ambitions.

Lehigh University for one, provides various examples of such successful communities comprising within itself. Just the fact that Lehigh has its own Council for Equity and Community for transcending racial and regional boundaries, demonstrates the level of concern the University has for its students from various social or cultural backgrounds. This step of establishing the council shows the principles of just and free thinking that are imparted in the University and tells us how everyone in a community has equal rights and duties, no matter what their status or religion maybe. Such kind of communities where all the differences are celebrated are the most powerful and united ones. The fact that even the alumni of the University are members of the council gives us an idea of how grateful every Lehigh student is towards his or her University and why shouldn't they be, after all it is here that they have learnt how to be a part of a community and what all to do to maintain the integrity and strength of their communities.

All these factors have just strengthened my urge to be a part of this prestigious University as I am now sure that even after my different cultural background, I'll be treated by everyone as one of their own and will be given equal and just opportunities to succeed. Thus Lehigh demonstrates a true example of how strong a community can develop if their is a perfect harmony between its people and everyone exercises their Equity for the overall growth of the community. If admitted, I too will try my level best to maintain the unity of the Lehigh community and try and give back what I really owe to the University.
bhan_msm   
Dec 21, 2009
Undergraduate / Lehigh Supplement Question- Why Lehigh? and Define Equity and Community? [7]

It is a good response.However if you want to target your response towards the University itself then go to its website and see its home page for Council of Equity and Community and get some ideas from their about how these both are viewed by Lehigh.You can also check my essay on equity and community
bhan_msm   
Dec 22, 2009
Undergraduate / calligraphy + the English Corner I found -Short Answer of the Common Application [9]

well written really.Its a well thought out and well planned answer.If anything can be done , then I would probably suggest putting more emotional feelings like you did in the last two lines and so you can cut down upon the details you provide about calligraphy and what all is done in it
bhan_msm   
Dec 22, 2009
Undergraduate / calligraphy + the English Corner I found -Short Answer of the Common Application [9]

What I mean by personal feeling is that you can write about how you felt when you were first introduced to calligraphy and then what changes have come in you after that, like you can write whether you have become more sensitive ,observant and admirer of nature and arts etc.
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