Essays / To write an essay regarding attitude [8]

how much do you have time??

Undergraduate / "born into an unstable family" - FSU admission essay [3]

I was born intoin an unstable family...

Undergraduate / USC transfer majoring in communication: What Matters to Me and Why [6]

hello
why do you want to use this sentence?? "since I came out of my mother's womb."
you can use better sentences...such as: since my eyes have seen the sky, have seen my mother's smile,,, whatever,,,... etc
I see knowledge as one of the most important partsinof my life, but this idea has not been apparent until I entered college. Back when I was ahigh schooler , ... YOU CAN say :During my high school ...

I was stubborn ?!!! you can use formal and possitive words instead...

Essays / To write an essay regarding attitude [8]

ok, just be calm,,,don't worry, you can start writing your ideas about the subject even in your own language,,,then after collecting all the information and ideas about that, you can write it in English,,,just know whar you want to write about

Scholarship / Holidays: a time to celebrate or take precaution - Intellectual Topic Essay [4]

hello... I think you should change this sentence too :
due to accidents on roads caused because of

Essays / Study abroad (personal statement / letter of intent) - starting ideas [9]

think about your goals, what you wanna do for them? what you want to learn at their university? about your background,,,records,,publicatons,, whatever that shows you are an active student and suitable to their team...think about your abilities, your strength... and write step by step,,,in different paragraphs and show a string body in your notes...be creative

Essays / Proper way to insert images into college-level paper [4]

you can send emails to the secretary of that department too, or you may have a friends studying there

Undergraduate / USC transfer majoring in communication: What Matters to Me and Why [6]

I do not want to become a robot that couldcan only mumble out information but not understanding what they mean or what they are use for and do not understand what they mean or what they ...?!! {what do you mean by THEY ARE USE FOR? do you mean THEY ARE USED FOR}

During my two years as a college student, I realized that ...
you can say that:During the two years of college

fascinating subjects that was not available fromat high school.

I beginbegan to feel like a humongous ...

well, you need more time working on your writing, good luck

Writing Feedback / Why do you want to be a part of Teach for India? [5]

as a process to not only to sharpen our brain but

Undergraduate / Gettysburg College: Why? Why? Why did you choose us? [7]

I think it is better for you to write clearly in a simple and honest way

Undergraduate / Academic History: University of Washington essay revision [3]

do you think it is a good idea if you write like this :
pessimistic teachers and influential peers shot down my dreams......well, tell more about your activities, your goals, your background... be possitive and strong

Writing Feedback / work that one finds fulfilling or work that pays well? Van Gogh, C.Marx examples [3]

Hello, I have written correct dictation of the words below:
hierarchy

sufficient

founder of

P russia

L ondon

inappropriate aspiration

accomplishment

would be absent

I appreciate

idealess

Writing Feedback / essay about yasser arafat [5]

many achievements
novel prize
note : city and country names should start with capital letters...
Palestinian, Cairo Egypt, Israel, ...

He was treating them the treatment of parents.
He treated them like parents do
For many years Arafat refused marriage...
refused to get marry...
after couple years of their married, they were giving a birth to their daughter called ...
After a couple of years after their marriage, their daughter was born.
before of his death.
before his death.