Writing Feedback / achieving happiness through relationships - IELTS ESSAY [6]

In achieving happiness relationships are of more importance than anything else in the world. Do you agree or disagree.

MY ESSAY
Human being is a social animal. So we cannot stand independent in this world and this relationship is the source of happiness to all. I fully agree to this statement.

Being a social animal each individual depend on each other's to satisfy their needs, whatever it may be. It is foolishness if one thinks that he can do everything in his life without others help. Not only happiness but our existence itself is based on this relationship. Knowingly or unknowingly we depend on others for our food, clothing, shelter, or job for instance.

More over our culture is one based on the belief of the family. Father, mother, brother, sister, uncle aunt-these relations play important role in our day-to-day life, our achievements and happiness. For example at bad times we dwell to our home and to the safety of our parents even at our adulthood at which we ourselves are expected to have the problem solving and decision making power. Time spend with family members or good friends are much valued than any other activity. Good relationships also lead us to success through the good advices and pointing the correct path. Our life is not devoid of unexpected emergencies or causalities. At those tomes good relations only come to our way with open hands of help.

To conclude, good relationships are unavoidable elements without which there won't be any meaning to our life. Only good relations can stretch a helping hand either at the limelight or twilight days of our life.

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Undergraduate / Experiances give valuable lessons-agree or disagree [9]

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement. Most experiences in our lives that seemed difficult at the time become valuable lessons for the future. Use reasons and specify examples to support your argument.

My Essay

Life is a journey with lots of experiences and events. All the experiences may not be good at the time, but later on one could understand the sweetness of success the lessons the bitter experiences give.

First of all, there will not be any one who hasn't experienced the sourness of life events. It is through the trial and error method one knows the lessons of life. For example, a toddler who starts walking manages to walk only after several falls and injuries. It is these injuries that help the child to walk properly. Similarly children who are curious about all things may try to catch the igniting fire of a lamp, and they realize it as a dangerous thing only after their fingers get burned, which give them the lesson not to play with fire.

Similarly those who are masters of driving may have surely experienced the taste of falls and broken limbs. Thus only with a failure one reaches the peak of success. One can easily handle the life situations, if one experiences it earlier, otherwise there will be certain difficulties. Great scientists, philosophers all reached their heights by overcoming the bad experiences. Abraham Lincoln, for instance, belonged to a very poor family and he became the president of America after several hard ships. But he ruled the country and led a humble life as he assimilated the lessons from the life. History provides many more examples like these including, Mahatma Gandhi, and Mother Teresa.

To conclude, life is full of good and bad experiences and even though they seem to be difficult at the time, they are valuable teachers, who teach us the correct and wrong paths of life, which we realize at the end when these experiences help to excel in our life.