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Posts by mynameisrena
Joined: Aug 22, 2010		 Last Post: Dec 22, 2010
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mynameisrena   
Sep 18, 2010
Undergraduate / "My dad passed away when i was just 11 years old", an application essay. [17]

Paige, your writing is good, but you have a few grammar and punctuation errors. Here are a few:

Well at first, I wasn't really sure, until my mother's strength and support, help lead the way.

My mom soon took the role as both mom and dad, trying her best to raise my two brothers and me .

I have never seen a person as strong and driven as my mom.

there wasn't a day that went by where i saw my mom mopping (i think you mean moping )around or giving up.

Hope that helped
Rena
mynameisrena   
Sep 21, 2010
Undergraduate / Idea for a perspective essay about diversity and different perspectives [5]

I'm trying to write the college essay about diversity and different perspectives. So I thought it would be really cool to write about how I see things when I am upside down. You see, when I get frustrated or confused or anything really, I like to stand on my head and look around. It really helps me to calm down and think. In addition to looking at things upside down, I'm also kind of obsessed with anagrams. I guess I'm kind of an Ada from Poisonwood Bible...but after describing the visual aspects of my upside down and backwards world where books and ideas both defy gravity, elvis lives, and sheet music turns from french impressionist to dissonant modern pieces, i'm at a loss for deeper stuff about how this difference in perception has changed my outlook on life or whatever. I have to have this essay before the 30th, and I'm kind of so stressed that writing about my stress reliever is stressing me out. Does anyone have ideas that could help??

I would really appreciate it!!
mynameisrena   
Dec 20, 2010
Undergraduate / "Chinese eat dogs"- a cultural conflict I enoutered, Common App [14]

Umm... I'm Chinese, too. So I just wanted to warn you that every Chinese senior from Memphis is writing the "Poor Chinese outcast beating the odds despite stereotyping" essay. Just be careful and have an open mind about writing this essay. It is a bit overdone and might be met with some annoyance at first...just my two cents
mynameisrena   
Dec 21, 2010
Undergraduate / "Chopsticks and Vietnamese Opera" - College of William and Mary [11]

I'm actually a little confused. Yeah, it was a fun read, but it didn't really tell me to much about you.

Here's what I got from you essay:
1) Your dad is a mean Vietnamese man who would rather you be tortured by a nanny that have you not know how to use chopsticks.

2) You think that the instructions on Chinese takeout things don't work. (Which, by the way, they do...)
3) Your nephew can't use chopsticks correctly. So fie upon your older sibling for letting your father's grandchild handle chopsticks incorrectly.

Basically, I think you focus too much on chopsticks and too much on yourself...
The first and last paragraphs don't make too much sense, and what was the "Chromic Frolic?" I don't get it. I mean, sure it sounds clever, but it doesn't apply...unless I'm incredibly dense and just don't see it.

Just my two cents :3 Hope it helped.

...and being Chinese, I found the last para a bit offensive. Might consider changing the wording.
mynameisrena   
Dec 21, 2010
Undergraduate / Any Topic - "Growing Up With Dumplings" [7]

A few grammar/spelling mistakes:

It was easy to looselose yourself amidst the chaos of relocating, finding jobs, and surviving school. However, even when we were inundated bywith work and stress, our family always found time to make some dumplingsfor dinner together.

I think this sounds a bit better. By the way, I'm Chinese as well. :)
mynameisrena   
Dec 21, 2010
Scholarship / "All of the great leaders" - quote essay for Vandy's chancellors scholarship [3]

Hey guys,

I'm applying for the Chancellor's Scholarship at Vandy, and it requires me to write an essay about a quote. Well, I haven't done this since elementary school, and I can't remember what I'm supposed to do.

the prompt is:

The values promoted by the Chancellor's Scholars are leadership, scholarship, diversity, and citizenship. To give the selection committee insight into your understanding of these values, please respond to the following statement in approximately 500 words:

"All of the great leaders have had one characteristic in common; it was the willingness to confront unequivocally the major anxiety of their people in their time. This, and not much else, is the essence of leadership." - John Kenneth Galbraith

Should I write a commentary on the quote (agree/disagree/qualify) or should I write about myself and something related to being a leader etc.,etc. ?

Thanks in advance for your help! Aja aja! fighting! :3
mynameisrena   
Dec 21, 2010
Undergraduate / "Chinese eat dogs"- a cultural conflict I enoutered, Common App [14]

Haha. @ Matrix Star! I can tell that you are from China by your reference to the hotpot. :)
No, in the US there is this stereotype that all Chinese people eat dogs and other bizarre foods. (Although most of us don't...) I think it's because Americans generalize all Chinese people and ascribe the stereotype generally given to those from Guangzhou to all Chinese people.
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