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lisa6394   
Nov 1, 2011
Undergraduate / 'I love throwing' - Stanford Supplement Roommate Question [6]

Stanford Roommate Essay
"Help your roommate - and us - get to know you better"

I love throwing. I compete in the shot put, discus, javelin, and hammer, and have traveled all over the United States to compete. I just love it! Spinning around and around and throwing with all my might releases the greatest amount of stress. Having an insanely busy schedule, from golf and track, to volunteering at a local theater, I've found I feel tons better when I go out and throw. It gives me a moment to not think about anything, except where and when to put my feet. Throwing offers me some sanity back into my life. I get to take a break from homework, tests, and chores. I've had the opportunity to meet Olympians and gold medalists while attending many camps to better myself in the throwing events. I am totally committed to this sport. I feel that in life, it helps to have something you're truly passionate about. Something you put all your energy into and help to forget about the madness of life. For me, that's throwing. I cannot wait to find out what you're truly passionate about. We have so many stories to share!

Is it ok? Feel free to edit and correct!!
lisa6394   
Nov 1, 2011
Undergraduate / 'from baseball to the stock market' - Stanford Roommate [3]

Wow. This is really good!! It has nice flow and transitions to it. Maybe some stuff about what you will do in college. I really like this site if you need any more help.

wiselikeus.com/collegewise/2009/11/stanford-university.html
lisa6394   
Nov 2, 2011
Undergraduate / Roomate + 'Opportunity cost' - Stanford essays from CAS [3]

I'm sorry. But in the second one, it feels to me that your trying to hard. Just be yourself! Say more about your yourself and the things you've done. I hope maybe this might help.
lisa6394   
Nov 2, 2011
Undergraduate / 'Love for the human body' - Stanford Intellectual Vitality [3]

Stanford students possess intellectual vitality. Reflect on an idea or experience that has been important to your intellectual development.

I have always loved the human body. Even from an early age I found it interesting. I love how everything's connected, and figuring out how the brain operates everything. The body is an infinite source of knowledge. Senior year I had my heart set on taking anatomy. I was ready, eager to learn everything I possibly could about the body. But, I didn't get in. I was really mad at first; especially the fact that all my friends had got in. I wanted to learn. I looked on Amazon and paid for a copy of "Grey's Anatomy". I was so excited when it came that I immediately sat down and started reading. If I couldn't take anatomy, I was going to teach myself. I read that book cover to cover. It was incredibly fascinating! All the inter-workings of it, all the connections, I had never thought the body could be that cool. I ended up helping the anatomy students do their homework. I can't wait to take an anatomy class in college, for real. Reading that book has made me see that I really want to pursue this subject more in college and eventually fulfill my dreams of being a doctor.

Is this ok? I don't know. I'm at 201 words btw. Please feel free to edit! Thanks!
lisa6394   
Nov 6, 2011
Undergraduate / "Parents Shaping My Future" -UC Prompt [9]

More about your yourself, instead of your "my parents." Remember, they're admitting you, not your parents. Talk about yourself. Open up more.
lisa6394   
Nov 6, 2011
Undergraduate / "Uniquely, Geeky" : Stanford Common App Essay [3]

I more I felt harassed - the more I felt harassed

Talk more about yourself, instead of the admission readers. The way the essay was introduced needs to be a little better brought in. If I were an admission person, I wouldn't care about what you think I do, I care about what you've done as a person and how you will help the campus.
lisa6394   
Nov 6, 2011
Undergraduate / "You can't do it." - Stanford Supplement What Matters to You [2]

What matters to you and why?

"You can't do it." Nothing makes me more determined than that little phrase. That's what my dad said when I told him I thought I could make it to the Junior Olympics. "You can't do it." Suddenly that was the only thing I could think about. I hadn't been throwing for very long and I wasn't that good yet, but I was determined to prove him wrong. I started working out every day, going to the gym, lifting weights, swimming, trying to get stronger. I would then go out to throw every day. I would practice for hours on end. When I had been training for months I finally got to the regional meet. I had to pass this meet to advance. I was so nervous. Everyone else was looking pretty good. It was my turn to go in the ring. With my dad watching, I walked to the back, implement in hand, and closed my eyes. I told myself, "I can do this." That was all it took. I launched that hammer all the way out of the cage. Anxiously waiting to see how far it was, I saw that it was a new personal best, and just enough to qualify for the Junior Olympics in Sacramento. I was incredibly happy and most of all relieved. I had done it. I have see that if I want to be successful in life I cannot just give up when others tell me no. What matters to me most, is having the strength and courage to never say, I give up.

Word count: 260

Feel free to correct! I really need help!
lisa6394   
Oct 3, 2012
Research Papers / Writing Paper for Criminal Justice Class on Castrations [2]

The use of castration as a punitive measure in the criminal justice system is not only wrong but it is also unconstitutional. Castrating someone in exchange for a lenient or no sentence at all is unfair to the victims and their families that have to deal with the fact that their assaulter is at large once again. I agree with Kari Vanderzyl because there are several challenges that the sterilization movement must overcome for this type of "treatment" to be constitutional. The problems lie in the Fourteenth and Eighth Amendments with regards to the right to privacy, the right of procreation, and cruel and unusual punishment.

Although there is no specific right to privacy in the Constitution the Supreme Court has ruled that in the case of Griswold v. Connecticut that section 1 of the Fourteenth Amendment, the Due Process Clause, creates a "zone of privacy" for all individuals under the law. The Court went on further to say that any individual has the right to be free from government intrusion especially in the right to procreate. This already makes castration unconstitutional in my eyes because you are taking away the right of the offender to procreate. However, I do think that like the Fourth Amendment, you can waive your right to privacy and to procreate but I do not think that this should be done just to get a lighter sentence. The choice of castration however, would not be voluntary for offenders because if you had the choice to go to prison labeled a child molester or have a procedure where you don't have to go to prison you would probably pick the procedure every time. Because going to prison a child molester is like being thrown into the lion's den, and offenders know this, making real consent to this type of procedure impossible.

Also under the Fourteenth Amendment in the same Due Process Clause is the fundamental right to procreation. In Skinner v. Oklahoma Justice Douglas called this " one of the basic civil rights of man." Obviously when you castrate someone you are taking away their right to have children, which is protected under the Fourteenth Amendment. The only way I think castration would be constitutional was if you had it as an option but you still had to serve out your time that you received for committing the crime. There would also need to be some sort of counseling to help facilitate this process and hopefully rehabilitate you so you won't come back to prison. Because rehabilitation should be the goal of the criminal justice system in the first place, not just locking the door and throwing away the key as it is now.

Castration would also violate the Eighth Amendment, which is cruel and unusual punishment. For a punishment to be unconstitutional it must be inherently cruel, disproportionate to the offense, or exceed the extent necessary to achieve the government's objectives. In the State v. Brown case, the Court ruled that castration is the same as physical mutilation and that would violate the cruelty requirement in the Eighth Amendment. Every person, even sex offenders, has the right to be free from government intrusion. They can also choose to not receive any surgical or pharmacological treatment. Should the castration issue be brought to the courts I think they would find that it does violate the Eighth Amendment. This makes sense to me that castration would be defined as physical mutilation but I also think that if it were truly voluntary, as in no extra incentives to do it, that it could be ruled constitutional. I think when you add in things like a lighter sentence or no sentence at all that it changes things because then it's not really a voluntary choice. It becomes something you have to do to stay out of prison.

Castration itself only deals with one thing, the offender can no longer procreate and supposedly their testosterone levels go down and they turn into a regular citizen. It does not however address the reason they are behaving this way in the first place. The way I see it is castration will get rid of the tree but it won't get to the roots of the problem in the first place. Also, like every other bad decision society has made it is almost always motivated by fear. Fear that sex offenders will be running around on the streets terrorizing people. Society loves finding quick fixes and cures to any ills that might plague them and it seems that castration is just another idea to eliminate crime. I tend to side with the Constitution and what the Supreme Court has interpreted it as so we can avoid jumping to those quick fixes.

I disagree with Lawrence Wright's assessment of castration because there isn't any real evidence as to whether the recidivism rate drops or not. I think he has failed to take into account all of the sex crimes that go unreported each year. I also don't like how he says that the problem is physical not psychological. Most criminals had troubled childhoods, which is where I believe the problems start. I think it is unfair to say it is either one fully, but more likely a combination of the two. I like how he says that nothing we are doing with the offenders has made any real difference in their lives. This may be because jails now are basically a place to store people not to rehabilitate and maybe help them. If you want to see real change in the amount of recidivism rates you must first change the system and see if that will help. Cutting off the offender's testicles is not going to really do anything unless you have the counseling and therapy to back it up. However, I do agree with Wright when he says that we shouldn't make it a punishment. If we were to allow this at all it must be voluntary and it must be used as a therapy.

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