Writing Feedback / IELTS: agricultural land degradation; Deforestation and over-cultivation [6]

The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. Summarize the in formation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Two chart and table given reveal the main causes of land degradation in the world and in three regions namely North America, Europe and Oceania in the 90s.

It is apparent that, the major activity leading to worldwide counterproductive agricultural land was overgrazing, which made up 35%. Deforestation and over-cultivation were the second and the third with 30% and 28% respectively, leaving 7 % for other reasons.

On the other hand, the causes of land degradation were different for various regions. As can be seen from the table, Europe had the largest proportion of land degraded, less than a quarter while this figure was 13% for Oceania and just 5 per cent for North America. Out of the percentage of degraded land in Europe, approximately a tenth was result of deforestation and about 8 percent was due to over-cultivation. By contrast, virtually 0% of counterproductive agricultural land was led by deforestation in North America and by over-cultivating in Oceania. It is interesting to note that overgrazing accounted for 11.3% of causing degraded land in Oceania, almost doubling than figure in Europe and much higher than one in North America.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS writing task 1-piechart provide the data of woman education grades in someland. [3]

The graphs show the proportion of woman participating in seven different education grades in Someland in two years 1945 and 1995. It can be seen that there were more and more woman studying in the higher education levels.

In 1945, most of women studied under grade 6. The number of woman taking part in 3rd grade and year 6 accounted for a half. In addition, up to 35% of woman did not go to school, leaving 10% for year 9, 4% for year 12 and just 1% for first degree. There was none women studied in post degree.

In 1995, all of women went to school. There was an dramatic increase in the percentage of woman studying the 12th grade or above, corresponding to the fall to zero of those studying third grade and year 6. The rate of women participating in first degree rose the most significantly, making up 50%. The women studying year 12, first degree and post degree together comprised 90% while the proportion for year 9 remained stable.

In summary, education for woman in Someland had an enormous improvement from 1945 to 1995.

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Writing Feedback / 'UK school spending' - IELTS writing - pie charts [3]

Three charts provided compares the total expenditure including 5 various different amounts of a UK school in three year 1981, 1991, and 2001.

It is evident that there were different changes amongst 5 types of spending in 3 given years.

With 40% in 1981, 50% in 1991 and 45% in 2001, teachers' salaries constituted the highest proportion of total expenditure, whereas insurance accounted for the lowest percentage ranging from a mere 2% to 8%. In contrast with the increase of insurance, other workers' salaries decreased gradually from 28% to 15% in 20 years.

Meanwhile, two other types of expenditure experienced different fluctuations. After a noticeable increase of 5% in 1991, the percentage of spending for resources books dropped dramatically to just under a tenth in 2001. By contrast, the proportion of total amount for furniture and equipments witnessed a sharp fall of 10% in the first ten years, then surged to under a quarter in 2001.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS - column chart about mobile phone ownerships in 6 countries. [2]

A glance at the column chart provides the number of mobile phone owners in six European countries in two separate years 2000 and 2005.

As can be seen from the graph, the mobile phone numbers increased dramatically in all 6 countries in the 5-year period.

Out of six nations, German experienced the greatest rise in the mobile phone ownerships from approximately 4 million to nearly 14 million in 5 years whereas Spain had the lowest growth of about 4 million. It is interesting to note that this country had the lowest number of mobile phone in 2 years 2000 and 2005.

Slightly more mobile phone numbers than German had in 2000, the UK witnessed a lower increase, reaching 12 million 5 years later. Meanwhile, Italy, Sweden, and France saw the relative similar growths of around 6 million throughout five years.